‫In this lesson, we'll be looking at our first model answer for Al's writing test to the question that
‫will be focusing on its advantages and disadvantages.
‫I'm not going to give you any less and know it as we really piecing all of the last few lessons together.
‫If you see any new language in the answer that I'm going to show you, please write it down and try
‫and use it in your own essay.
‫So here is the question.
‫And remember, it's important that you plan for every question you get before even doing the plan,
‫we should identify the type of question it is.
‫I've already told you that we'll be looking at it.
‫Advantages and disadvantages, question.
‫And it's easy to see that this is that type of question due to the phrase do the advantages outweigh
‫the disadvantages?
‫This sentence is also really important in our question, because it is definitely asking you to give
‫an opinion, which you can include in your conclusion.
‫So let's have a final read through the question and move on to our introduction.
‫Today, people are buying more consumer goods like jewelry and household appliances, that the advantages
‫outweigh the disadvantages.
‫So here we are at our three sentence introduction paraphrase plan and outline, I'm going to go through
‫each sentence to show you how I would create my introduction to answer this question.
‫First up, paraphrase.
‫In modern society, the general public are buying more leisure and luxury products than ever before.
‫The key phrases that I paraphrased here are today into modern society.
‫People into the general public and consumer goods into leisure and luxury products.
‫At the end of the sentence, I added the phrase than ever before, but actually this isn't completely
‫needed.
‫Let's see the second sentence, which is plan.
‫Throughout this essay, I will explore the advantages and disadvantages for this trend and express my
‫own opinion on the matter.
‫Now, a key phrase here that you haven't seen before is that last part and express my own opinion on
‫the matter.
‫You can easily use this in the second sentence of your introduction if you are going to give your opinion
‫and more often than not, you will be asked to give your opinion.
‫And he is sentence three hour outline.
‫Firstly, I will discuss the negatives of people buying more consumer goods, and secondly, I will
‫share the positives of this trend.
‫Note here, our two time OpenNet firstly and secondly.
‫Let's take a look at the introduction in full and have one final read through.
‫In modern society, the general public are buying more leisure and luxury products than ever before.
‫Throughout this essay, I will explore the advantages and disadvantages for this trend and express my
‫own opinion on the matter.
‫Firstly, I will discuss the negatives of people buying more consumer goods, and secondly, I will
‫share the positives of this trend.
‫So that is our introduction complete.
‫Let's move on to our first supporting paragraph.
‫Now, before I show you my first supporting paragraph, I thought it would be a good idea to review
‫these three sentence types as we use them all the time in supporting paragraphs in blue is the topic
‫sentence, which gives the main idea of what you're going to talk about in Green is the support sentence.
‫And this adds detail to your topic sentence.
‫And of course, lastly is our real life example.
‫Let's take a look at my first supporting paragraph.
‫Many consumer goods do not give any real benefit to the person who bought them.
‫Moreover, these purchased items may have cost the consumer a substantial sum of money, possibly causing
‫stress over personal finances.
‫For example, many of these goods could be bought with loans or other types of credit, which may not
‫always be paid back due to the lack of funds or other financial commitments.
‫On top of that, household appliances such as TVs and air conditioners need a lot of energy to be powered
‫as a result of debt the individual will find they are again having to balance more bills and commitments
‫than is achievable.
‫Let's take a look at what went well in this first supporting paragraph.
‫Well, for starters, there's a mix of very interesting advance sentence openers.
‫There's very low repetition throughout this paragraph showing a range of vocabulary.
‫It's logically ordered as the topic sentence is followed by a support sentence and an example.
‫And finally, there is a good mix of sentence structures.
‫So overall, this supporting paragraph does take a lot of the boxes and the examiners banned descriptors.
‫Let's move to our second supporting paragraph.
‫On the other hand, jewelry and fashion gives many people great happiness.
‫Furthermore, if people have enough disposable income to spend on luxury items that make them happy,
‫then that should be their personal choice.
‫If a person has enough money for an iPad without getting into debt, then they should be free to buy
‫that item.
‫Many people feel they should also support certain companies and buy their products as a result of this.
‫The producers of consumer goods can employ large numbers of people giving them jobs and financial security.
‫The main focus of this supporting paragraph is to discuss the advantages of consumer goods.
‫Let's take a look at what went well in supporting paragraph two.
‫Again, the writer shows an excellent range of vocabulary by not repeating the language too often.
‫This paragraph is also well organized and sticks to the topics of port example structure.
‫And finally, there's also an excellent range of openers used in this essay.
‫So now we have our two supporting paragraphs, firstly for disadvantages and our second paragraph,
‫four advantages, and now it's time to give our conclusion and to give our own opinion.
‫In conclusion, there are many benefits and negatives to the increase in people purchasing more consumer
‫goods.
‫In my opinion.
‫Overall, the increase is a positive thing as it shows that more people have disposable income to spend
‫on items they truly like.
‫The red text is my summary of all the main points in my essay, and the blue text is my own opinion.
‫So there is the end of our first model answer for alt writing test two coming up straight after this
‫lecture, will be the whole essay clearly written down in one document for you.
‫I highly recommend stealing language from these model answers and practice using them on your own.
‫See you in the next lesson.