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‫In this lesson, we'll be looking at our first model answer for Al's writing test to the question that

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‫will be focusing on its advantages and disadvantages.

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‫I'm not going to give you any less and know it as we really piecing all of the last few lessons together.

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‫If you see any new language in the answer that I'm going to show you, please write it down and try

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‫and use it in your own essay.

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‫So here is the question.

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‫And remember, it's important that you plan for every question you get before even doing the plan,

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‫we should identify the type of question it is.

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‫I've already told you that we'll be looking at it.

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‫Advantages and disadvantages, question.

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‫And it's easy to see that this is that type of question due to the phrase do the advantages outweigh

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‫the disadvantages?

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‫This sentence is also really important in our question, because it is definitely asking you to give

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‫an opinion, which you can include in your conclusion.

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‫So let's have a final read through the question and move on to our introduction.

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‫Today, people are buying more consumer goods like jewelry and household appliances, that the advantages

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‫outweigh the disadvantages.

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‫So here we are at our three sentence introduction paraphrase plan and outline, I'm going to go through

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‫each sentence to show you how I would create my introduction to answer this question.

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‫First up, paraphrase.

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‫In modern society, the general public are buying more leisure and luxury products than ever before.

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‫The key phrases that I paraphrased here are today into modern society.

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‫People into the general public and consumer goods into leisure and luxury products.

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‫At the end of the sentence, I added the phrase than ever before, but actually this isn't completely

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‫needed.

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‫Let's see the second sentence, which is plan.

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‫Throughout this essay, I will explore the advantages and disadvantages for this trend and express my

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‫own opinion on the matter.

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‫Now, a key phrase here that you haven't seen before is that last part and express my own opinion on

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‫the matter.

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‫You can easily use this in the second sentence of your introduction if you are going to give your opinion

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‫and more often than not, you will be asked to give your opinion.

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‫And he is sentence three hour outline.

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‫Firstly, I will discuss the negatives of people buying more consumer goods, and secondly, I will

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‫share the positives of this trend.

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‫Note here, our two time OpenNet firstly and secondly.

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‫Let's take a look at the introduction in full and have one final read through.

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‫In modern society, the general public are buying more leisure and luxury products than ever before.

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‫Throughout this essay, I will explore the advantages and disadvantages for this trend and express my

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‫own opinion on the matter.

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‫Firstly, I will discuss the negatives of people buying more consumer goods, and secondly, I will

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‫share the positives of this trend.

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‫So that is our introduction complete.

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‫Let's move on to our first supporting paragraph.

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‫Now, before I show you my first supporting paragraph, I thought it would be a good idea to review

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‫these three sentence types as we use them all the time in supporting paragraphs in blue is the topic

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‫sentence, which gives the main idea of what you're going to talk about in Green is the support sentence.

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‫And this adds detail to your topic sentence.

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‫And of course, lastly is our real life example.

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‫Let's take a look at my first supporting paragraph.

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‫Many consumer goods do not give any real benefit to the person who bought them.

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‫Moreover, these purchased items may have cost the consumer a substantial sum of money, possibly causing

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‫stress over personal finances.

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‫For example, many of these goods could be bought with loans or other types of credit, which may not

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‫always be paid back due to the lack of funds or other financial commitments.

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‫On top of that, household appliances such as TVs and air conditioners need a lot of energy to be powered

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‫as a result of debt the individual will find they are again having to balance more bills and commitments

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‫than is achievable.

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‫Let's take a look at what went well in this first supporting paragraph.

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‫Well, for starters, there's a mix of very interesting advance sentence openers.

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‫There's very low repetition throughout this paragraph showing a range of vocabulary.

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‫It's logically ordered as the topic sentence is followed by a support sentence and an example.

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‫And finally, there is a good mix of sentence structures.

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‫So overall, this supporting paragraph does take a lot of the boxes and the examiners banned descriptors.

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‫Let's move to our second supporting paragraph.

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‫On the other hand, jewelry and fashion gives many people great happiness.

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‫Furthermore, if people have enough disposable income to spend on luxury items that make them happy,

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‫then that should be their personal choice.

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‫If a person has enough money for an iPad without getting into debt, then they should be free to buy

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‫that item.

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‫Many people feel they should also support certain companies and buy their products as a result of this.

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‫The producers of consumer goods can employ large numbers of people giving them jobs and financial security.

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‫The main focus of this supporting paragraph is to discuss the advantages of consumer goods.

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‫Let's take a look at what went well in supporting paragraph two.

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‫Again, the writer shows an excellent range of vocabulary by not repeating the language too often.

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‫This paragraph is also well organized and sticks to the topics of port example structure.

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‫And finally, there's also an excellent range of openers used in this essay.

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‫So now we have our two supporting paragraphs, firstly for disadvantages and our second paragraph,

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‫four advantages, and now it's time to give our conclusion and to give our own opinion.

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‫In conclusion, there are many benefits and negatives to the increase in people purchasing more consumer

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‫goods.

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‫In my opinion.

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‫Overall, the increase is a positive thing as it shows that more people have disposable income to spend

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‫on items they truly like.

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‫The red text is my summary of all the main points in my essay, and the blue text is my own opinion.

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‫So there is the end of our first model answer for alt writing test two coming up straight after this

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‫lecture, will be the whole essay clearly written down in one document for you.

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‫I highly recommend stealing language from these model answers and practice using them on your own.

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‫See you in the next lesson.