‫Hello, everyone.
‫We are now going to move onto a muddled writing lesson, which is our first model, right, for a test
‫to topic, and today it will be on the common test.
‫Two topic of environment.
‫Once again, I'll be showing you the writing process from the very start, receiving the question all
‫the way through to completing that essay.
‫Before we take a look at the question, here is our features checklist.
‫In red, we have our task, achievement and cohesion and coherence features, and underneath in green,
‫we have vocabulary and grammar.
‫Let's take a look from the top.
‫So we have, as I talk to you in an earlier lesson, the three sentence introduction.
‫Then we have our two support paragraphs where you'll be adding all your detail and of course, a conclusion,
‫whether that's one sentence or two, depending if you need to give your opinion.
‫We've also got clear ordering, which I mean structure.
‫It means are you clearly answering the question in your body paragraphs by discussing things in a logical
‫order?
‫And of course, we need to include examples in our task to ask and I'll be showing you how to do that
‫in this lesson.
‫Underneath we have topic specific vocabulary, and this will highly test your understanding of synonyms.
‫Then we have an interesting sentence opener's, which will help to organize your writing and of course,
‫a mix of sentence types.
‫So that is all for our features checklist, again, if you're writing essays for other tasks.
‫Two questions.
‫I suggest using this to give you some idea about what you need to include.
‫Again, this isn't the whole feature checklist of everything that you must include, but it is eight
‫clear features that I think you should try and get into your report.
‫OK, let's take a look at this question.
‫Human activity has had a negative effect on ecosystems, animals and plants across the world.
‫Some people believe this cannot be changed, while others feel that we can still take action to protect
‫living things and the environment.
‫Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
‫As with any task to question, you must identify what type of question it is that you will need to answer
‫here.
‫I can see that this type of question is a discussion of both sides, of a point of thinking.
‫And I I'm also being asked to give my opinion, which I must include in my conclusion.
‫So now that I've identified the question type, it's time to move on to writing a plan, so let's do
‫that now.
‫In our plans for a test to say we need to include, quite simply, what we will write in each body paragraph
‫and what we will write in our opinion, if you've been asked to give one.
‫So I need to discuss both sides of paragraph.
‫One will be people who believe it cannot be changed.
‫And I'm going to discuss why they might think that.
‫I'll put two main points here.
‫I think first I will talk about growing economies across the world, economies across the world, across
‫the world.
‫Factories and growth, that kind of thing.
‫My second point would be to say the high total population across the world, which makes it difficult
‫to control how we protect the environment.
‫In paragraph two, as I'm being asked to discuss both sides, I will talk about the people who believe
‫they can help the environment.
‫And I'm going to talk about some specific ideas and give examples.
‫I think first I'm going to talk about clean energy, such as, let's say, solar energy, so I can talk
‫about that and discuss why it's a great thing.
‫And people believe that it will help.
‫And for my second point, I think I will discuss.
‫Banning plastic bags.
‫That's definitely something that we've heard a lot about in recent news.
‫OK, so that's my plan for the two body paragraphs.
‫And I have been asked to give my opinion, and I'm definitely in favor of helping the environment so
‫I can say I believe we can make a positive impact.
‫And of course, I can develop that a little bit in my essay.
‫OK, so that is my plan complete for this task to question.
‫And is now time that we move on to our writing?
‫To begin our task, one report, we will need to include our three sentence introduction paragraph.
‫Now, we learned about this a few lessons earlier, and if you can't remember exactly what the three
‫sentence introduction is, I do suggest you go back and have another look.
‫But quite simply, the sentences are paraphrased, plan and outline.
‫So that's what I will do to kick off my essay.
‫I'll begin by paraphrasing the question.
‫Human activity has had a negative effect on ecosystem animals and plants across the world.
‫So let's begin a synonym for human human activity, let's say human beings have had.
‫A damaging instead of negative, a damaging impact instead of effect on the environment, environment
‫and all living things on our planet.
‫There you go.
‫So that is our first sentence in the introduction, which simply paraphrases the question.
‫We now move on to the -- sentence of the introduction where we'll simply say what we will be doing
‫in this essay.
‫So in this essay, I will discuss as this is a discussion essay, both sides of public opinion to helping
‫or not helping.
‫Protect the environment further.
‫Quite simply, that's just telling the examiner what I will be doing in this essay.
‫It also signals to the examiner that I understand what type of question this is.
‫And finally, we'll move on to our outline sentence.
‫The outline sentence simply tells the examiner what we will be including in our body paragraph.
‫So, as you should always do, firstly, I will discuss why people feel they can no longer help the
‫natural, their help living things and their local environment.
‫I'm just trying to find new synonyms to add here and secondly, and make sure we spelling things correctly.
‫And secondly, I will explore, explore instead of discuss what action people are taking to benefit
‫the natural world, natural world instead of environment.
‫So already I'm kind of using some topic specific vocabulary, which is great.
‫OK, so let's have a read back of my introduction paragraph.
‫Human beings have had a damaging impact on the environment and all living things on our planet.
‫In this essay, I will discuss both sides of public opinion to helping or not helping protect the environment
‫further.
‫Firstly, I will discuss why people feel they can no longer help living things in their local environment.
‫And secondly, I will explore what action people are taking to benefit the natural world.
‫In my first body paragraph, I will discuss why people think that it cannot be changed.
‫And you remember in my plan I was discussing or I noted down at developing economies and also a world
‫population, which is something I can talk about in my first body paragraph.
‫You remember from an earlier lesson that I was talking about, topic sentences, support sentences and
‫example sentences.
‫So I want to include those in this right up here.
‫So let's start off with an opener for this.
‫Many people feel many people feel that they can no longer help the environment
‫due to a rapidly developing economies.
‫OK, so we've made our topic sentence.
‫So we're going to be talking about rapidly developing economies.
‫Now we can add more detail with the support sentence.
‫So we can say many of these countries.
‫Many of these countries.
‫That becoming industrialized.
‫Again, more topic, specific vocabulary, excuse my spelling there, and British spelling with an S..
‫Many of these countries that are becoming industrialized rely rely on factories to produce and create
‫goods.
‫OK, so now I can move on to my example sentence, we can say, for example, which we will have to
‫start off our example sentence.
‫For example, some Asian countries produce many goods.
‫Many goods for the West, which in turn and I'll just check that spelling again, that which in turn
‫creates pollution.
‫Pollution, but also jobs for poor people, let's say that, OK, so that's my topic, support an example
‫sentence.
‫Let's move on to my second point, which is about world populations.
‫Let's begin with another reason people feel helpless to help the earth is due to rising population levels
‫and now I want to support sentence.
‫So let's say it is difficult to say whether we can sustain such huge numbers of inhabitants on our planet.
‫Now, I want to give a specific example about this idea of high population levels.
‫I think we could talk about producing food.
‫It takes a lot of energy to produce food, and it may be that we are already too highly populated to
‫feed everyone.
‫So that's my reasoning for why people think it cannot be helped that we can save the earth.
‫OK, so let's move on to my second body paragraph, which is going to talk about people who believe
‫we can still save the earth.
‫So in my plan, I think the first point I made was about solar energy.
‫So let's talk about that.
‫Will create a topic sentence now to introduce the topic of solar energy.
‫Let's start with on the other hand, on the other hand, there are many people who feel we can still
‫help our environment by using technology such as solar power and the support sentence.
‫So add a bit more detail.
‫Solar power is a renewable energy.
‫That and of course, check your spelling one moment.
‫Renewable energy that has no negative effect on the natural world.
‫OK, that's my support sentence.
‫Now, maybe we could give an example.
‫For example, again, if we could use more renewable and renewable energies.
‫We could provide power and electricity for more people without hurting the environment.
‫OK, so that gives an example about how solar power could help lots of people.
‫And let's move on to my second point, which was talking about plastic bags, I might not add support
‫an example sentence here as I need to think about whether I'm writing too much.
‫I don't want to go too far over the word limit.
‫I might just write a topic and example sentence.
‫So two more sentences here.
‫So we could say many countries are also now banning the use of plastic bags such as India, have included
‫an example there in my topic sentence.
‫And let's give an example for why this is a positive thing.
‫Let's get a sentence opener to give support to this topic sentence.
‫Consequently, a great way to add further information.
‫Consequently, India's cities and local wildlife have become healthier and cleaner.
‫So I've just used a topic, an example sentence here to add more detail to my second body paragraph.
‫Let's move on to our conclusion, which is going to have two sentences.
‫So my conclusion will begin with a paraphrased sentence to give an overview of the whole essay.
‫It is clear to see that we are facing many challenges in protecting the environment
‫in our modern world.
‫OK, so I kind of paraphrase that, yeah, it is quite difficult.
‫There are different ideas.
‫Some people believe one thing and other people believe another thing.
‫So it's a challenging situation to be in.
‫So that's my first sentence.
‫And now I want to give my opinion, which is in support of this, in my opinion.
‫And you can always begin your opinion centers like this, in my opinion, comma.
‫I feel very strongly about ensuring the safety and well-being of our planet and feel just add a bit
‫more detail and of course, a different kind of sentence and feel that governments worldwide should
‫make this their top priority.
‫OK, priority.
‫Excuse me.
‫There we go.
‫Say we've read the introduction.
‫Let's read back from our first body paragraph here.
‫Many people feel that they can no longer help the environment due to rapidly developing economies.
‫Many of these countries that are becoming industrialized rely on factories to produce and create goods.
‫For example, some Asian countries produce many goods for the West, which in turn creates pollution,
‫but also jobs for poorer people.
‫And let's move on to my second point.
‫Another reason people feel helpless to help the earth is due to rising population levels.
‫And here's a support sentence.
‫It is difficult to say whether we can sustain such huge numbers of inhabitants on our planet.
‫It takes a lot of energy to produce food, and it may be that we are already too highly populated to
‫feed everyone.
‫And here's my second body paragraph discussing the feeling that we can help the Earth.
‫On the other hand, there are many people who feel we can still help our environment by using technology
‫such as solar panel, which is the first idea I want to discuss.
‫Solar power is a renewable energy that has no negative effect on the natural world.
‫For example, if we could use more renewable energies, we could provide power and electricity for more
‫people without hurting the environment.
‫Many countries are also now banning the use of plastic bags such as India.
‫Plastic bags is my second idea I want to discuss for helping the Earth.
‫Consequently, India's cities and local wildlife have become healthier and cleaner.
‫It is clear to see that we are facing many challenges in protecting the environment in our modern world,
‫in my opinion.
‫I feel very strongly about ensuring the safety and well-being of our planet and feel that governments
‫worldwide should make this their top priority.
‫So there is my opinion in that final sentence there.
‫Let's take a quick look through the features checklist, so three sentence introduction, we definitely
‫have to support or body paragraphs.
‫Yes, we have those conclusion.
‫Yes, we have, including the opinion that we were asked to give here examples.
‫I definitely gave plenty of examples, such as India, which has banned plastic bags and, you know,
‫good for India.
‫And here topic specific vocabulary.
‫Definitely.
‫I've got words such as environment and government, solar power, renewable energy.
‫So I've got lots of topic specific vocabulary, sentence openers.
‫On the other hand, it is clear to say, and I'm sure we've got more examples in here and a mix of sentence
‫types, I've definitely included a mix of simple compound and complex structures.
‫So overall, I think I've done quite a good job in writing a well-structured and reasonably well detailed
‫essay on this question on the environment.
‫And so that's all for this muddled writing lesson.
‫And I'll see you in the next lesson.