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‫Hello, everyone.

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‫We are now going to move onto a muddled writing lesson, which is our first model, right, for a test

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‫to topic, and today it will be on the common test.

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‫Two topic of environment.

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‫Once again, I'll be showing you the writing process from the very start, receiving the question all

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‫the way through to completing that essay.

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‫Before we take a look at the question, here is our features checklist.

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‫In red, we have our task, achievement and cohesion and coherence features, and underneath in green,

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‫we have vocabulary and grammar.

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‫Let's take a look from the top.

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‫So we have, as I talk to you in an earlier lesson, the three sentence introduction.

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‫Then we have our two support paragraphs where you'll be adding all your detail and of course, a conclusion,

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‫whether that's one sentence or two, depending if you need to give your opinion.

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‫We've also got clear ordering, which I mean structure.

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‫It means are you clearly answering the question in your body paragraphs by discussing things in a logical

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‫order?

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‫And of course, we need to include examples in our task to ask and I'll be showing you how to do that

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‫in this lesson.

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‫Underneath we have topic specific vocabulary, and this will highly test your understanding of synonyms.

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‫Then we have an interesting sentence opener's, which will help to organize your writing and of course,

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‫a mix of sentence types.

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‫So that is all for our features checklist, again, if you're writing essays for other tasks.

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‫Two questions.

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‫I suggest using this to give you some idea about what you need to include.

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‫Again, this isn't the whole feature checklist of everything that you must include, but it is eight

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‫clear features that I think you should try and get into your report.

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‫OK, let's take a look at this question.

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‫Human activity has had a negative effect on ecosystems, animals and plants across the world.

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‫Some people believe this cannot be changed, while others feel that we can still take action to protect

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‫living things and the environment.

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‫Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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‫As with any task to question, you must identify what type of question it is that you will need to answer

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‫here.

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‫I can see that this type of question is a discussion of both sides, of a point of thinking.

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‫And I I'm also being asked to give my opinion, which I must include in my conclusion.

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‫So now that I've identified the question type, it's time to move on to writing a plan, so let's do

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‫that now.

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‫In our plans for a test to say we need to include, quite simply, what we will write in each body paragraph

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‫and what we will write in our opinion, if you've been asked to give one.

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‫So I need to discuss both sides of paragraph.

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‫One will be people who believe it cannot be changed.

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‫And I'm going to discuss why they might think that.

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‫I'll put two main points here.

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‫I think first I will talk about growing economies across the world, economies across the world, across

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‫the world.

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‫Factories and growth, that kind of thing.

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‫My second point would be to say the high total population across the world, which makes it difficult

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‫to control how we protect the environment.

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‫In paragraph two, as I'm being asked to discuss both sides, I will talk about the people who believe

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‫they can help the environment.

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‫And I'm going to talk about some specific ideas and give examples.

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‫I think first I'm going to talk about clean energy, such as, let's say, solar energy, so I can talk

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‫about that and discuss why it's a great thing.

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‫And people believe that it will help.

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‫And for my second point, I think I will discuss.

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‫Banning plastic bags.

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‫That's definitely something that we've heard a lot about in recent news.

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‫OK, so that's my plan for the two body paragraphs.

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‫And I have been asked to give my opinion, and I'm definitely in favor of helping the environment so

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‫I can say I believe we can make a positive impact.

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‫And of course, I can develop that a little bit in my essay.

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‫OK, so that is my plan complete for this task to question.

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‫And is now time that we move on to our writing?

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‫To begin our task, one report, we will need to include our three sentence introduction paragraph.

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‫Now, we learned about this a few lessons earlier, and if you can't remember exactly what the three

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‫sentence introduction is, I do suggest you go back and have another look.

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‫But quite simply, the sentences are paraphrased, plan and outline.

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‫So that's what I will do to kick off my essay.

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‫I'll begin by paraphrasing the question.

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‫Human activity has had a negative effect on ecosystem animals and plants across the world.

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‫So let's begin a synonym for human human activity, let's say human beings have had.

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‫A damaging instead of negative, a damaging impact instead of effect on the environment, environment

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‫and all living things on our planet.

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‫There you go.

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‫So that is our first sentence in the introduction, which simply paraphrases the question.

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‫We now move on to the -- sentence of the introduction where we'll simply say what we will be doing

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‫in this essay.

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‫So in this essay, I will discuss as this is a discussion essay, both sides of public opinion to helping

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‫or not helping.

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‫Protect the environment further.

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‫Quite simply, that's just telling the examiner what I will be doing in this essay.

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‫It also signals to the examiner that I understand what type of question this is.

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‫And finally, we'll move on to our outline sentence.

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‫The outline sentence simply tells the examiner what we will be including in our body paragraph.

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‫So, as you should always do, firstly, I will discuss why people feel they can no longer help the

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‫natural, their help living things and their local environment.

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‫I'm just trying to find new synonyms to add here and secondly, and make sure we spelling things correctly.

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‫And secondly, I will explore, explore instead of discuss what action people are taking to benefit

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‫the natural world, natural world instead of environment.

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‫So already I'm kind of using some topic specific vocabulary, which is great.

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‫OK, so let's have a read back of my introduction paragraph.

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‫Human beings have had a damaging impact on the environment and all living things on our planet.

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‫In this essay, I will discuss both sides of public opinion to helping or not helping protect the environment

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‫further.

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‫Firstly, I will discuss why people feel they can no longer help living things in their local environment.

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‫And secondly, I will explore what action people are taking to benefit the natural world.

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‫In my first body paragraph, I will discuss why people think that it cannot be changed.

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‫And you remember in my plan I was discussing or I noted down at developing economies and also a world

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‫population, which is something I can talk about in my first body paragraph.

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‫You remember from an earlier lesson that I was talking about, topic sentences, support sentences and

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‫example sentences.

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‫So I want to include those in this right up here.

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‫So let's start off with an opener for this.

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‫Many people feel many people feel that they can no longer help the environment

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‫due to a rapidly developing economies.

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‫OK, so we've made our topic sentence.

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‫So we're going to be talking about rapidly developing economies.

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‫Now we can add more detail with the support sentence.

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‫So we can say many of these countries.

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‫Many of these countries.

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‫That becoming industrialized.

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‫Again, more topic, specific vocabulary, excuse my spelling there, and British spelling with an S..

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‫Many of these countries that are becoming industrialized rely rely on factories to produce and create

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‫goods.

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‫OK, so now I can move on to my example sentence, we can say, for example, which we will have to

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‫start off our example sentence.

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‫For example, some Asian countries produce many goods.

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‫Many goods for the West, which in turn and I'll just check that spelling again, that which in turn

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‫creates pollution.

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‫Pollution, but also jobs for poor people, let's say that, OK, so that's my topic, support an example

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‫sentence.

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‫Let's move on to my second point, which is about world populations.

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‫Let's begin with another reason people feel helpless to help the earth is due to rising population levels

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‫and now I want to support sentence.

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‫So let's say it is difficult to say whether we can sustain such huge numbers of inhabitants on our planet.

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‫Now, I want to give a specific example about this idea of high population levels.

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‫I think we could talk about producing food.

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‫It takes a lot of energy to produce food, and it may be that we are already too highly populated to

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‫feed everyone.

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‫So that's my reasoning for why people think it cannot be helped that we can save the earth.

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‫OK, so let's move on to my second body paragraph, which is going to talk about people who believe

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‫we can still save the earth.

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‫So in my plan, I think the first point I made was about solar energy.

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‫So let's talk about that.

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‫Will create a topic sentence now to introduce the topic of solar energy.

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‫Let's start with on the other hand, on the other hand, there are many people who feel we can still

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‫help our environment by using technology such as solar power and the support sentence.

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‫So add a bit more detail.

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‫Solar power is a renewable energy.

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‫That and of course, check your spelling one moment.

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‫Renewable energy that has no negative effect on the natural world.

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‫OK, that's my support sentence.

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‫Now, maybe we could give an example.

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‫For example, again, if we could use more renewable and renewable energies.

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‫We could provide power and electricity for more people without hurting the environment.

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‫OK, so that gives an example about how solar power could help lots of people.

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‫And let's move on to my second point, which was talking about plastic bags, I might not add support

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‫an example sentence here as I need to think about whether I'm writing too much.

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‫I don't want to go too far over the word limit.

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‫I might just write a topic and example sentence.

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‫So two more sentences here.

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‫So we could say many countries are also now banning the use of plastic bags such as India, have included

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‫an example there in my topic sentence.

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‫And let's give an example for why this is a positive thing.

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‫Let's get a sentence opener to give support to this topic sentence.

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‫Consequently, a great way to add further information.

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‫Consequently, India's cities and local wildlife have become healthier and cleaner.

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‫So I've just used a topic, an example sentence here to add more detail to my second body paragraph.

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‫Let's move on to our conclusion, which is going to have two sentences.

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‫So my conclusion will begin with a paraphrased sentence to give an overview of the whole essay.

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‫It is clear to see that we are facing many challenges in protecting the environment

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‫in our modern world.

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‫OK, so I kind of paraphrase that, yeah, it is quite difficult.

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‫There are different ideas.

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‫Some people believe one thing and other people believe another thing.

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‫So it's a challenging situation to be in.

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‫So that's my first sentence.

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‫And now I want to give my opinion, which is in support of this, in my opinion.

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‫And you can always begin your opinion centers like this, in my opinion, comma.

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‫I feel very strongly about ensuring the safety and well-being of our planet and feel just add a bit

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‫more detail and of course, a different kind of sentence and feel that governments worldwide should

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‫make this their top priority.

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‫OK, priority.

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‫Excuse me.

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‫There we go.

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‫Say we've read the introduction.

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‫Let's read back from our first body paragraph here.

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‫Many people feel that they can no longer help the environment due to rapidly developing economies.

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‫Many of these countries that are becoming industrialized rely on factories to produce and create goods.

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‫For example, some Asian countries produce many goods for the West, which in turn creates pollution,

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‫but also jobs for poorer people.

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‫And let's move on to my second point.

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‫Another reason people feel helpless to help the earth is due to rising population levels.

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‫And here's a support sentence.

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‫It is difficult to say whether we can sustain such huge numbers of inhabitants on our planet.

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‫It takes a lot of energy to produce food, and it may be that we are already too highly populated to

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‫feed everyone.

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‫And here's my second body paragraph discussing the feeling that we can help the Earth.

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‫On the other hand, there are many people who feel we can still help our environment by using technology

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‫such as solar panel, which is the first idea I want to discuss.

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‫Solar power is a renewable energy that has no negative effect on the natural world.

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‫For example, if we could use more renewable energies, we could provide power and electricity for more

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‫people without hurting the environment.

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‫Many countries are also now banning the use of plastic bags such as India.

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‫Plastic bags is my second idea I want to discuss for helping the Earth.

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‫Consequently, India's cities and local wildlife have become healthier and cleaner.

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‫It is clear to see that we are facing many challenges in protecting the environment in our modern world,

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‫in my opinion.

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‫I feel very strongly about ensuring the safety and well-being of our planet and feel that governments

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‫worldwide should make this their top priority.

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‫So there is my opinion in that final sentence there.

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‫Let's take a quick look through the features checklist, so three sentence introduction, we definitely

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‫have to support or body paragraphs.

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‫Yes, we have those conclusion.

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‫Yes, we have, including the opinion that we were asked to give here examples.

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‫I definitely gave plenty of examples, such as India, which has banned plastic bags and, you know,

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‫good for India.

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‫And here topic specific vocabulary.

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‫Definitely.

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‫I've got words such as environment and government, solar power, renewable energy.

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‫So I've got lots of topic specific vocabulary, sentence openers.

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‫On the other hand, it is clear to say, and I'm sure we've got more examples in here and a mix of sentence

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‫types, I've definitely included a mix of simple compound and complex structures.

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‫So overall, I think I've done quite a good job in writing a well-structured and reasonably well detailed

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‫essay on this question on the environment.

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‫And so that's all for this muddled writing lesson.

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‫And I'll see you in the next lesson.