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‫Hello, everyone, here we have another modelled writing lesson for a task to question again, it's

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‫in a more of a live environment, so there'll be less editing and you'll be watching me going through

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‫the whole writing process.

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‫So before we move on to take a look at our task to question, let's quickly remind ourselves what features

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‫we need to include in our essay.

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‫So I need to include a three sentence introduction.

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‫I'm going to need to support paragraphs and a conclusion in the conclusion there may or may not be an

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‫opinion sentence.

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‫There needs to be some clear ordering and structure in my writing.

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‫So that's really thinking about my organization.

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‫I need to include some examples too.

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‫And then for vocabulary and grammar, some topic specific vocabulary, sentence openers make them interesting

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‫and a mix of sentence types that simple compound complex sentences which we covered in the earlier grammar

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‫lesson in this section of the course.

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‫OK, so I've just gone over my features checklist just to refresh my memory about what I need to include

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‫in my writing.

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‫So let's move ahead and take a look at the question.

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‫So here is our question, let's have a read through and think about what type of question this is.

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‫Many students now work whilst they are studying in college or university.

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‫This often results in them having less time to concentrate on their studies as well as feeling under

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‫pressure.

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‫What are some of the causes of this?

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‫What solutions could you suggest?

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‫OK, so we've had a read through the question.

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‫Before we move on to writing the plan, let's think about what kind of question this is so you can see

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‫the last two sentences I've actually highlighted in italics.

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‫What are some of the causes of this?

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‫What solutions could you suggest?

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‫So just from these two sentences, I can tell that this is a problem solution question.

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‫I need to identify what problems that are featured in the question, and I need to suggest some ways

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‫to fix or find solutions for this problem.

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‫So that's quite straightforward.

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‫I'm going to move on to writing my plan now, which is simply going to be a quick outlay, a quick outline

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‫of what I will be doing in each body paragraph.

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‫Let's just look back to the question so many students are working while studying for a college or university,

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‫and it results in less time for concentrating on studies, as well as making them feel under pressure

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‫or stressed.

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‫So why are students doing this?

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‫What kind of solutions can I suggest?

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‫So why are students working when they should be studying?

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‫I think the obvious answer to that is quite simply, for money.

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‫So if we say financial reasons for working, so we could say loans, accommodation, and here I need

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‫to suggest a solution.

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‫So what can I say for the solution?

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‫You could say free grants, free government grants.

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‫So the government giving students money whilst they are studying for a government grant.

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‫So we could say so free government grants.

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‫We could also say subsidized, subsidized, subsidized accommodation, accommodation, changed it to

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‫the Americans for help.

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‫But that's OK.

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‫Subsidized accommodation, OK, a free government grant subsidized accommodation.

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‫So in my first paragraph, I'm going to talk about the financial reasons for student wanting to earn

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‫money while studying, which is probably the main reason, I'm sure.

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‫And my solution is for government to give free grants or to subsidize accommodation subsidized means

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‫to provide something for a very small price.

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‫So it may be that the government supply student accommodation for 20 percent of the normal price.

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‫This is what I'll talk about in this paragraph.

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‫And the other idea that comes to mind for my second body paragraph is to talk about our work experience,

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‫so it may be that students are trying to get work experience before finishing their studies, which

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‫will make it easier for students to find employment.

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‫So let's say for work experience and a solution for this problem of sort of working while studying could

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‫be to offer work experience in courses.

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‫And here I'll say sandwich course.

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‫So this is a bit of topic specific vocabulary.

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‫A sandwich course is generally considered academic and work experience.

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‫For example, a four year sandwich course, maybe three years studying and one year work experience.

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‫These kind of courses generally take away some of the problems of students working while studying.

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‫OK, so let's have a read three paragraph one financial reasons for working, maybe that paying off

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‫loans or accommodation and how can I solve this problem of students needed money and working while studying,

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‫I've suggested that government could give grants or subsidize accommodation to help them financially.

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‫And for my second paragraph, I'm suggesting that a cause for students needing to work while studying

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‫is for work experience.

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‫And I suggested my solution is to offer work experience in courses.

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‫So try and push this idea of more sandwich courses to try and help students concentrate more on their

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‫studies.

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‫OK, so that is my plan complete.

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‫I feel quite confident now that I understand the question and I know what I will be writing.

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‫Now, you may remember that in our support or body paragraphs for a problem solution question, the

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‫sentence types that we need to use are slightly different.

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‫And we covered this a few lessons ago in this section of the course.

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‫So I think it would be wise to go over that now.

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‫Let's take a look just to refresh our memory, so supporting paragraphs for a problem, solution type

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‫question, we still have topic, sentence, support sentence.

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‫But if you remember, we also need to include a solution sentence and a result sentence.

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‫This was obviously covid a few lessons ago.

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‫If you need, please go back and refresh your memory more.

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‫But effectively, each supporting paragraph can be four sentences long.

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‫Or you might want to add a little bit more detail to these sentences to make sure you're hitting the

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‫word count.

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‫But so when I write my essay now for this student working question, I'm going to write four sentences

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‫for each supporting paragraph.

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‫So topic, sentence, support, sentence, solution, sentence and result sentence.

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‫So let me move on to writing this report.

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‫OK, so let's begin with our three sentence introduction.

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‫So the first sentence in the introduction wants to be a paraphrase of the question.

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‫Many students now work whilst they are studying in college or university.

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‫This often results in them having less time to concentrate on their studies as well as feeling under

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‫pressure.

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‫So I need to get that into one sentence and paraphrase as best as I can to introduce the problem and

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‫the essay.

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‫I might begin with increasingly, increasingly, students are having to work while studying to studying,

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‫meaning they are unable to concentrate.

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‫What synonym can I think of here focus?

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‫Meaning they are unable to focus fully on their studies, on their learning, let's say, on their learning.

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‫OK, so that's pretty much the problem.

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‫Increasingly, students are having to work while studying, meaning they are unable to focus fully on

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‫their learning.

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‫And we've got an interesting sentence here.

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‫It seems to be a complex sentence.

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‫OK, so we now need to write our plan.

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‫So we can start this, as always, in this essay, I will discuss this rising problem and suggest solutions

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‫and you could, in fact use this in every single problem solution essay.

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‫You can copy this pretty much straight into any problem solution essay.

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‫And now I need to say exactly what I will be doing in this essay.

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‫So we begin an outline with firstly, I will explore instead of discuss why students, I will explore

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‫the financial implications, reasons, implications for students needing to find employment whilst working

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‫now instead of just saying for students needing to work, I wanted to train very and make my language

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‫more interesting.

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‫So instead of just students needing to find work, I decided employment, some using a mix of language

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‫in my essay.

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‫Firstly, I will explore the financial implications for students needing to find employment whilst working.

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‫And secondly, secondly, and secondly.

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‫And secondly, sorry.

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‫And secondly, I will discuss how work experience may influence their decision to work.

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‫OK, so let's have a quick read.

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‫Three Increasingly students are having to work while studying, meaning they are unable to focus fully

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‫on their learning.

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‫In this essay, I will discuss this rising problem and suggest solutions.

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‫Firstly, I will explore the financial implications for students needing to find employment whilst working.

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‫And I've realised, I've said whilst working.

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‫So whilst studying that highlights, it's quite important to try and quickly read back your writing,

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‫which I would definitely recommend you do.

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‫And secondly, I will discuss how work experience may influence their decision to work.

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‫So I think that's a very strong three sentence introduction so I can now move on to my support paragraph.

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‫So from the plan we were starting off to discuss in the first paragraph about the financial reasons

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‫for students needing to work.

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‫It is true that education can be very expensive for students needing further education.

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‫That's my topic sentence, I'm talking about the expense, the financial implications, and I need a

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‫support sentence here.

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‫Let's say as a result, as a result of needing money for student finance, I'm using some topic specific

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‫vocabulary.

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‫This is a collocation student finance and living expenses.

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‫As a result of needing money for student finance and living expenses, many and I need a synonym now

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‫for student as I feel like I'm repeating student too often, let his undergraduates undergraduates.

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‫That's more specifically for universities.

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‫But again, topic specific vocabulary.

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‫As a result of needing money for student finance and living expenses, many undergraduates are needing

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‫to find new revenue.

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‫Let's not say new revenue.

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‫That sounds strange and needing to find work.

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‫Let's just say find work.

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‫OK, now I need my solution sentence so I can suggest what solutions can be created to solve this problem.

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‫Let's begin with one solution.

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‫One solution to this problem could be local governments funding students with free grants and subsidized

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‫subsidized accommodation.

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‫And then I need to say what the result is.

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‫So it's my result sentence as a result.

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‫Of this added support, students would feel less stressed and worried about needing to finance their

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‫learning journey or learning their learning and studying.

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‫And studying, which may also lead to higher scores in their studies.

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‫OK, so quickly read this, but it is true that education can be very expensive for students needing

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‫further education.

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‫I feel like I'm repeating myself a little bit there.

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‫So I'm going to say for students needing further studies as a result of needing money for student finance

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‫and living expenses, many undergraduates are needing to find work.

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‫One solution to this problem could be local government funding students with free grants and subsidized

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‫accommodation as a result of this added support.

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‫Students would feel less stressed and worried about needing to finance their learning and studying,

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‫which may also lead to higher scores in their studies.

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‫OK, so that's my first paragraph complete.

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‫I now will move on to speaking about work experience so students wanting to work to gain real life experience,

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‫which will obviously help them when they finish their studies.

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‫Let me begin say another cause for students working whilst attending, let's say academic institutions,

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‫institutions is to gain real life work experience to help find employment post studies.

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‫OK, that's my topic sentence.

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‫So one of the causes is work experience.

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‫So let's add my support sentence.

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‫We can say and our can let's get an interesting opener.

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‫Consequently, many students are concentrating on finding desired work experience and not focusing their

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‫energies on studies and learning.

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‫Consequently, many students are concentrating on finding desired work experience and not focusing their

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‫energies on studies and learning.

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‫OK.

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‫And I now need a solution for this.

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‫And you remember from my plan, I was suggesting some which courses one suggested solution to this issue

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‫could be to offer more sandwich courses, which include an amount of in-house, which means at an office

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‫or workplace, an amount of in-house working

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‫working experience and will now move on to our result sentence.

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‫So let's begin with this would have a beneficial.

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‫Beneficial impact on student attainment.

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‫So that is a great piece of topic specific vocabulary for education attainment means how well you score

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‫in your learning.

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‫For example, student attainment was high.

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‫It meant that many students were passing.

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‫So this would have a beneficial impact on student attainment as as my connective as learners could focus

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‫on their courses

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‫at all times.

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‫OK, so let's read this back.

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‫Another cause for students working whilst attending academic institutions is to gain real life work

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‫experience to help find employment post studies after studies.

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‫Consequently, many students are concentrating on finding desired work experience and not focusing their

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‫energies on studies and learning.

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‫One suggested solution to this issue could be to offer more sandwich courses, which include an amount

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‫of in-house working experience.

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‫This would have a beneficial impact, a great collocation there on student attainment, some really

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‫good topic, specific vocabulary as learners could focus on their courses at all times.

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‫OK, my support paragraphs are complete, so it's now time to go to my conclusion, which is not going

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‫to include my opinion.

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‫So I just need to paraphrase this issue and everything that I've discussed in one sentence here.

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‫Let's begin with, in conclusion, a great way to start your conclusion paragraph.

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‫In conclusion, we can see that this is a difficult issue for people wanting to study as the need to

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‫work is obviously high with many different reasons for needing employment.

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‫That kind of just sums up the whole issue in one sentence.

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‫In conclusion, we can see that this is a difficult issue for people wanting to study as the need to

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‫work is obviously high with many different reasons for needing employment.

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‫So that's my conclusion in one sentence, and that's the report in full.

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‫That's my sorry essay.

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‫My task to essay in full.

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‫Let's quickly go through the features checklist, say three sentence introduction is there to support

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‫paragraphs.

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‫Yes, we have them conclusion.

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‫Definitely a clear ordering.

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‫Now, I made the plan which made me concentrate on one problem and solution for each paragraph.

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‫So that's definitely well structured, thanks to my plan examples.

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‫So I'm giving lots of examples.

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‫Topic specific vocabulary.

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‫Yes, we said that we've included some really good topic, specific vocabulary, sentence openers.

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‫In conclusion, another cause it is true increasingly.

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‫Definitely we have this and a mix of sentence types.

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‫Definitely.

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‫I have some simple sentences, I think somewhere and lots of compound and complex sentences.

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‫So I know that I've included the sort of core features in my essay.

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‫And yes, that brings us to the end of this muddled writing lesson.

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‫I hope that you found it useful.

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‫See you in the next lesson.