1 00:00:02,800 --> 00:00:03,340 All right. 2 00:00:03,340 --> 00:00:08,500 Let's go ahead and move forward and write the specific detail paragraphs. 3 00:00:09,070 --> 00:00:16,990 Remember, with specific detail paragraphs, we're now making micro comparisons, small individual comparisons, 4 00:00:17,020 --> 00:00:18,630 not macro comparisons. 5 00:00:18,640 --> 00:00:20,320 Micro comparisons. 6 00:00:21,920 --> 00:00:28,250 You don't have to talk about every single comparison that you see, but just point out the interesting, 7 00:00:28,250 --> 00:00:30,650 noteworthy comparisons that you see. 8 00:00:32,300 --> 00:00:35,330 Now if you want to go ahead and write your own. 9 00:00:35,630 --> 00:00:41,420 When I go to the next screen, pause the lecture, set your timer on 10 minutes and write your specific 10 00:00:41,420 --> 00:00:49,130 detail, paragraph one and specific detail paragraph to then come back and compare your paragraphs to 11 00:00:49,130 --> 00:00:52,400 mine and look at where you could have improved. 12 00:00:56,060 --> 00:01:02,450 So here when we're looking at the pie chart, we can see the information that I'm going to be using. 13 00:01:03,860 --> 00:01:09,980 All of the information in red I'm going to be talking about in a paragraph and the information in green 14 00:01:10,310 --> 00:01:13,310 I'll be talking about in another paragraph. 15 00:01:13,850 --> 00:01:20,870 Now, of course, you can write it any kind of way you want to write it as long as you are making specific 16 00:01:20,870 --> 00:01:22,190 comparisons. 17 00:01:23,560 --> 00:01:27,010 Remember, your vocabulary matters. 18 00:01:27,400 --> 00:01:29,920 Your sentence structure matters. 19 00:01:30,490 --> 00:01:33,460 Your coherence makes a difference. 20 00:01:34,260 --> 00:01:36,150 Don't make spelling mistakes. 21 00:01:36,750 --> 00:01:40,410 Your goal is to write mistake free sentences. 22 00:01:41,290 --> 00:01:48,430 If you want to check your grammar and vocabulary, my suggestion is to use a great application called 23 00:01:48,430 --> 00:01:49,270 Grammarly. 24 00:01:50,940 --> 00:01:56,220 Grammarly has a free application w w w Graham Telecom. 25 00:01:56,880 --> 00:02:03,660 I personally use the premium version because the premium version concentrates on everything. 26 00:02:04,200 --> 00:02:09,810 It looks at style, word, choice, synonyms, paraphrasing all the grammar mistakes. 27 00:02:09,810 --> 00:02:11,460 It tells you how to improve it. 28 00:02:13,490 --> 00:02:17,510 I think it's one of the best sources to use for the exam when it comes to writing. 29 00:02:18,470 --> 00:02:19,880 Now, enough about that. 30 00:02:20,330 --> 00:02:23,540 Let's go ahead and talk about the specific detail paragraphs. 31 00:02:23,930 --> 00:02:29,750 I'm going to show you my specific detail, paragraph number one, and explain the comparisons and then 32 00:02:29,750 --> 00:02:31,020 talk about specific detail. 33 00:02:31,040 --> 00:02:32,150 Paragraph number two. 34 00:02:33,030 --> 00:02:38,700 If you want to write your own, go ahead and stop it right now and write your paragraphs and then come 35 00:02:38,700 --> 00:02:39,660 back and compare. 36 00:02:40,380 --> 00:02:40,680 All right. 37 00:02:40,680 --> 00:02:43,650 So here is my specific detail, paragraph number one. 38 00:02:47,820 --> 00:02:55,680 A specific analysis reveals that the combined totals of sodium at lunch and breakfast equaled the 43% 39 00:02:55,680 --> 00:02:56,940 taken in at dinner. 40 00:02:58,020 --> 00:03:05,400 Similarly, the tally percentage for saturated fat consumption for snacks and breakfasts matched the 41 00:03:05,400 --> 00:03:07,980 37% digested during dinner. 42 00:03:08,910 --> 00:03:11,700 In a like manner to the previous points. 43 00:03:12,090 --> 00:03:19,890 Consolidated consolidated sugar ingestion percentages at dinner and lunch paralleled the 42% eaten at 44 00:03:19,890 --> 00:03:20,760 snack time. 45 00:03:23,000 --> 00:03:23,570 Right. 46 00:03:24,050 --> 00:03:26,000 So look at what I'm doing here. 47 00:03:27,010 --> 00:03:28,300 Look at what I'm doing here. 48 00:03:29,560 --> 00:03:30,730 Let's look at sodium. 49 00:03:31,210 --> 00:03:32,410 When we look at sodium. 50 00:03:33,160 --> 00:03:35,890 And we're talking about lunch and breakfasts. 51 00:03:38,350 --> 00:03:38,590 All right. 52 00:03:38,590 --> 00:03:40,150 We're talking about lunch and breakfast. 53 00:03:40,150 --> 00:03:42,970 So here we have breakfast at 14%. 54 00:03:43,390 --> 00:03:44,830 Lunch at 29%. 55 00:03:44,830 --> 00:03:46,270 That equals 43%. 56 00:03:46,270 --> 00:03:47,530 That equals dinner. 57 00:03:48,550 --> 00:03:50,440 That's a comparison, everybody. 58 00:03:51,310 --> 00:03:52,600 That's a comparison. 59 00:03:54,220 --> 00:03:55,600 That's what we're doing here. 60 00:03:57,530 --> 00:04:00,920 And then when we're talking about saturated fat. 61 00:04:03,410 --> 00:04:06,590 We're looking at snacks and breakfasts. 62 00:04:08,620 --> 00:04:09,700 Here's snacks. 63 00:04:09,700 --> 00:04:10,990 Here's breakfast. 64 00:04:12,180 --> 00:04:13,980 The total equals 37%. 65 00:04:13,980 --> 00:04:15,240 It equals this amount. 66 00:04:16,070 --> 00:04:18,220 This plus this equals this. 67 00:04:18,230 --> 00:04:19,820 That's the second sentence. 68 00:04:22,610 --> 00:04:24,560 And then for the third sentence. 69 00:04:25,190 --> 00:04:26,360 We have. 70 00:04:28,660 --> 00:04:30,010 Dinner and lunch. 71 00:04:31,170 --> 00:04:31,460 Right. 72 00:04:31,470 --> 00:04:35,910 Dinner and lunch, 23 plus 19 equals 42. 73 00:04:37,830 --> 00:04:38,580 I use. 74 00:04:38,580 --> 00:04:39,630 I noticed that. 75 00:04:39,630 --> 00:04:43,320 I noticed that comparison and I wrote three sentences. 76 00:04:43,320 --> 00:04:47,670 Now look at how I'm building the coherence. 77 00:04:48,150 --> 00:04:55,170 Similarly, in a like manner, I'm connecting all of this information together. 78 00:04:55,960 --> 00:04:58,420 That's how you write in a coherent way. 79 00:05:00,900 --> 00:05:02,880 That's how you write in a coherent way. 80 00:05:04,550 --> 00:05:10,160 Take a look at the vocabulary that I'm using, the variety of vocabulary that I'm using. 81 00:05:10,700 --> 00:05:13,880 Let's go ahead and take a look at my specific paragraph. 82 00:05:13,880 --> 00:05:14,600 Number four. 83 00:05:17,070 --> 00:05:19,050 Regarding Americans absorbing sugar. 84 00:05:19,050 --> 00:05:27,360 In the course of the day, the percentage steadily rose by 3% between breakfast and lunch and then 4% 85 00:05:27,360 --> 00:05:28,800 from lunch to dinner. 86 00:05:30,060 --> 00:05:37,140 As opposed to the other nutrients the citizens took in sodium at the same 14% for snacks and breakfast. 87 00:05:37,830 --> 00:05:45,600 On a final note, between breakfast and lunch, the saturated fat jumped 10% and then an additional 88 00:05:45,600 --> 00:05:48,300 11% from lunch to dinner. 89 00:05:51,220 --> 00:05:51,730 Again. 90 00:05:51,730 --> 00:05:54,850 Go back and look at how I'm constructing things. 91 00:05:55,210 --> 00:05:56,290 Look at the construction. 92 00:05:56,290 --> 00:05:57,790 So we're looking at sugar. 93 00:06:00,780 --> 00:06:05,340 Looking at sugar between breakfast and lunch, it jumped by 3%. 94 00:06:06,400 --> 00:06:10,690 Then from lunch to dinner, we rose an additional 4%. 95 00:06:12,280 --> 00:06:14,560 Do you see how I'm making the comparisons? 96 00:06:16,990 --> 00:06:26,360 Look at sodium and snacks and snack sodium for snacks and breakfast is the same. 97 00:06:26,380 --> 00:06:28,090 That's something to point out. 98 00:06:29,650 --> 00:06:31,480 That's what you're doing here, everybody. 99 00:06:32,320 --> 00:06:34,930 You're making micro comparisons. 100 00:06:35,260 --> 00:06:37,030 Micro comparisons. 101 00:06:37,900 --> 00:06:39,820 Look at what you wrote just now. 102 00:06:40,300 --> 00:06:41,170 Compare it. 103 00:06:41,170 --> 00:06:43,000 Compare your specific detail. 104 00:06:43,000 --> 00:06:47,350 Paragraph number three to my specific detail, paragraph number three. 105 00:06:48,550 --> 00:06:54,730 And then compare your specific your specific detail, paragraph four to my specific detail, paragraph 106 00:06:54,730 --> 00:06:55,540 number four. 107 00:06:57,870 --> 00:07:00,150 I want you to improve and get better now. 108 00:07:00,330 --> 00:07:05,130 It's possible you may have found some comparisons that I didn't make. 109 00:07:05,860 --> 00:07:07,120 And that's okay. 110 00:07:08,030 --> 00:07:08,750 That's okay. 111 00:07:08,780 --> 00:07:11,240 There are different types of comparisons you can make. 112 00:07:12,670 --> 00:07:17,470 As long as they are micro and specific, not general. 113 00:07:17,500 --> 00:07:20,710 Use the numbers, use the percentages. 114 00:07:21,730 --> 00:07:22,120 All right. 115 00:07:22,120 --> 00:07:29,980 So I hope that you learned a little bit more in this lecture about how to really make these specific 116 00:07:29,980 --> 00:07:31,210 comparisons. 117 00:07:32,170 --> 00:07:32,410 Now. 118 00:07:32,410 --> 00:07:34,150 Go out there and practice on your own. 119 00:07:34,180 --> 00:07:35,080 Take care. 120 00:07:35,110 --> 00:07:36,160 Have a great day.