All right.
Let's go ahead and move forward and write the specific detail paragraphs.
Remember, with specific detail paragraphs, we're now making micro comparisons, small individual comparisons,
not macro comparisons.
Micro comparisons.
You don't have to talk about every single comparison that you see, but just point out the interesting,
noteworthy comparisons that you see.
Now if you want to go ahead and write your own.
When I go to the next screen, pause the lecture, set your timer on 10 minutes and write your specific
detail, paragraph one and specific detail paragraph to then come back and compare your paragraphs to
mine and look at where you could have improved.
So here when we're looking at the pie chart, we can see the information that I'm going to be using.
All of the information in red I'm going to be talking about in a paragraph and the information in green
I'll be talking about in another paragraph.
Now, of course, you can write it any kind of way you want to write it as long as you are making specific
comparisons.
Remember, your vocabulary matters.
Your sentence structure matters.
Your coherence makes a difference.
Don't make spelling mistakes.
Your goal is to write mistake free sentences.
If you want to check your grammar and vocabulary, my suggestion is to use a great application called
Grammarly.
Grammarly has a free application w w w Graham Telecom.
I personally use the premium version because the premium version concentrates on everything.
It looks at style, word, choice, synonyms, paraphrasing all the grammar mistakes.
It tells you how to improve it.
I think it's one of the best sources to use for the exam when it comes to writing.
Now, enough about that.
Let's go ahead and talk about the specific detail paragraphs.
I'm going to show you my specific detail, paragraph number one, and explain the comparisons and then
talk about specific detail.
Paragraph number two.
If you want to write your own, go ahead and stop it right now and write your paragraphs and then come
back and compare.
All right.
So here is my specific detail, paragraph number one.
A specific analysis reveals that the combined totals of sodium at lunch and breakfast equaled the 43%
taken in at dinner.
Similarly, the tally percentage for saturated fat consumption for snacks and breakfasts matched the
37% digested during dinner.
In a like manner to the previous points.
Consolidated consolidated sugar ingestion percentages at dinner and lunch paralleled the 42% eaten at
snack time.
Right.
So look at what I'm doing here.
Look at what I'm doing here.
Let's look at sodium.
When we look at sodium.
And we're talking about lunch and breakfasts.
All right.
We're talking about lunch and breakfast.
So here we have breakfast at 14%.
Lunch at 29%.
That equals 43%.
That equals dinner.
That's a comparison, everybody.
That's a comparison.
That's what we're doing here.
And then when we're talking about saturated fat.
We're looking at snacks and breakfasts.
Here's snacks.
Here's breakfast.
The total equals 37%.
It equals this amount.
This plus this equals this.
That's the second sentence.
And then for the third sentence.
We have.
Dinner and lunch.
Right.
Dinner and lunch, 23 plus 19 equals 42.
I use.
I noticed that.
I noticed that comparison and I wrote three sentences.
Now look at how I'm building the coherence.
Similarly, in a like manner, I'm connecting all of this information together.
That's how you write in a coherent way.
Take a look at the vocabulary that I'm using, the variety of vocabulary that I'm using.
Let's go ahead and take a look at my specific paragraph.
Number four.
Regarding Americans absorbing sugar.
In the course of the day, the percentage steadily rose by 3% between breakfast and lunch and then 4%
from lunch to dinner.
As opposed to the other nutrients the citizens took in sodium at the same 14% for snacks and breakfast.
On a final note, between breakfast and lunch, the saturated fat jumped 10% and then an additional
11% from lunch to dinner.
Again.
Go back and look at how I'm constructing things.
Look at the construction.
So we're looking at sugar.
Looking at sugar between breakfast and lunch, it jumped by 3%.
Then from lunch to dinner, we rose an additional 4%.
Do you see how I'm making the comparisons?
Look at sodium and snacks and snack sodium for snacks and breakfast is the same.
That's something to point out.
That's what you're doing here, everybody.
You're making micro comparisons.
Micro comparisons.
Look at what you wrote just now.
Compare it.
Compare your specific detail.
Paragraph number three to my specific detail, paragraph number three.
And then compare your specific your specific detail, paragraph four to my specific detail, paragraph
number four.
I want you to improve and get better now.
It's possible you may have found some comparisons that I didn't make.
And that's okay.
That's okay.
There are different types of comparisons you can make.
As long as they are micro and specific, not general.
Use the numbers, use the percentages.
All right.
So I hope that you learned a little bit more in this lecture about how to really make these specific
comparisons.
Now.
Go out there and practice on your own.
Take care.
Have a great day.