1 00:00:01,570 --> 00:00:05,620 Thank you so much for joining me again in this lecture. 2 00:00:05,620 --> 00:00:10,510 We're going to complete our two different charts before. 3 00:00:10,510 --> 00:00:16,390 In the previous lecture, we wrote the introduction and general overview, and now we're going to move 4 00:00:16,390 --> 00:00:19,420 forward with writing the specific detailed paragraphs. 5 00:00:19,540 --> 00:00:25,540 Remember, with specific details, it's about the details, the numbers, the differences, the similarities 6 00:00:25,720 --> 00:00:27,220 to paragraphs. 7 00:00:28,290 --> 00:00:33,540 5 minutes for each paragraph, 2 to 3 sentences for each paragraph. 8 00:00:33,840 --> 00:00:38,550 However, I really believe you should try to write three sentences. 9 00:00:38,820 --> 00:00:44,850 If you write three sentences, three sentences for each of these specific detailed paragraphs, you're 10 00:00:44,850 --> 00:00:48,120 going to get a much better task achievement score. 11 00:00:51,470 --> 00:00:55,610 So here we're dealing with the two chart style. 12 00:00:55,640 --> 00:00:59,000 The bar graph is at the top, the line graph is at the bottom. 13 00:00:59,570 --> 00:01:10,040 So for now, as you know, what I'm doing is I'm breaking it down in between 85 to 87 and then talking 14 00:01:10,040 --> 00:01:12,050 about 87 to 1990. 15 00:01:12,980 --> 00:01:19,250 And I'm doing the same for the line graph, 85 to 87 and 87 to 1990. 16 00:01:19,640 --> 00:01:28,700 So this information from 85 to 90, this information for the bar graph and line graph. 17 00:01:29,090 --> 00:01:33,440 I'm going to talk about both in my third paragraph. 18 00:01:34,910 --> 00:01:44,450 I'm going to talk about both in my third paragraph and then for my fourth paragraph from 90 to 92 and 19 00:01:44,450 --> 00:01:47,810 92 to 95 or 93 to 95. 20 00:01:48,200 --> 00:01:53,600 And the same for the line graph 90 all the way to 94. 21 00:01:54,350 --> 00:02:00,440 All of this information from 92, 95, 90 to 94. 22 00:02:00,590 --> 00:02:04,520 I'm going to talk about together in the fourth paragraph. 23 00:02:04,790 --> 00:02:07,940 I'm going to make direct comparisons. 24 00:02:08,790 --> 00:02:11,820 Because a lot of students don't know how to do that. 25 00:02:12,660 --> 00:02:18,180 Now, I know some of you are going to write the bar graph in one in paragraph three, and the line graph 26 00:02:18,180 --> 00:02:19,230 in paragraph four. 27 00:02:19,260 --> 00:02:20,040 That's fine. 28 00:02:20,040 --> 00:02:21,030 But you know what? 29 00:02:21,390 --> 00:02:27,210 When they give you two different graphs of charts and they give you the same time periods they want 30 00:02:27,210 --> 00:02:27,980 you to compare. 31 00:02:27,990 --> 00:02:29,400 So that's what I'm going to do. 32 00:02:30,580 --> 00:02:36,970 So go ahead and set your clock for 5 minutes, central clock for 5 minutes. 33 00:02:37,540 --> 00:02:41,650 And if you want to write the same way, I'm going to write it. 34 00:02:41,950 --> 00:02:47,110 You want to talk about from 85 to 1994, the third paragraph. 35 00:02:47,410 --> 00:02:51,290 You're going to include the information for the bar graph and line graph. 36 00:02:51,310 --> 00:02:56,710 So go ahead, stop the lecture and write your third paragraph now. 37 00:02:56,740 --> 00:02:59,170 Then come back and compare it to mine. 38 00:03:02,110 --> 00:03:02,730 Okay. 39 00:03:02,740 --> 00:03:05,260 Here's my third paragraph. 40 00:03:07,970 --> 00:03:18,170 Now, the 1990, the 1985 to 1987, specific details reveal that worldwide tourism declined by around 41 00:03:18,170 --> 00:03:25,940 2 million, while the particular trips to Australia marginally increased by 2% during this period. 42 00:03:27,180 --> 00:03:31,590 So first I talked about 85 to 87. 43 00:03:32,730 --> 00:03:33,270 Right. 44 00:03:33,660 --> 00:03:36,150 5 to 7, roughly. 45 00:03:37,460 --> 00:03:37,930 Right. 46 00:03:37,940 --> 00:03:39,980 So that's why I see it by around. 47 00:03:40,810 --> 00:03:47,440 I don't have it specific enough, so I have to use information that's similar to approximately or about. 48 00:03:48,670 --> 00:03:50,200 Then we're using a. 49 00:03:50,980 --> 00:04:00,040 Complex sentence and with Australia marginally increased, as we have saying, small increase of going 50 00:04:00,040 --> 00:04:06,370 from 2 million going up or going up roughly about 2%. 51 00:04:07,080 --> 00:04:08,370 From here to here. 52 00:04:08,370 --> 00:04:09,540 And this one is more exact. 53 00:04:09,570 --> 00:04:15,120 I was right on the line so I can say I can see a 2% increase. 54 00:04:16,360 --> 00:04:20,320 So we've covered 85 to 87, 85 to 87. 55 00:04:21,220 --> 00:04:24,880 Next from 1987 to 1990. 56 00:04:25,060 --> 00:04:29,440 Now we're moving 87 to 90, 87 to 90. 57 00:04:29,830 --> 00:04:33,970 Global travel continue to increase by approximately 4 million. 58 00:04:35,350 --> 00:04:47,020 But for Australia, Japanese citizen voyages first edged up by 1% and then slightly scaled back to just 59 00:04:47,020 --> 00:04:48,340 above 4%. 60 00:04:49,520 --> 00:04:59,540 So from 87 to 90 right here, we went from five to roughly. 61 00:05:00,470 --> 00:05:07,400 Let's see, we went from I'm sorry, 87, seven, I'm sorry, seven to roughly 11. 62 00:05:07,400 --> 00:05:16,520 We increased and then from for the Australia chart we went up by 1%. 63 00:05:17,450 --> 00:05:20,870 And then we dipped to just above 4%. 64 00:05:21,620 --> 00:05:21,810 Right. 65 00:05:21,830 --> 00:05:23,900 We dipped to just above 4%. 66 00:05:24,770 --> 00:05:31,940 So what we're looking at here is a way of comparing the two charts against each other. 67 00:05:32,450 --> 00:05:34,250 The two charts against each other. 68 00:05:35,920 --> 00:05:39,850 So look at your paragraph and compare it to what I've done. 69 00:05:40,330 --> 00:05:45,070 Now let's go ahead and move to the fourth specific details paragraph. 70 00:05:45,310 --> 00:05:51,640 Now we're going from 90 to 95 for the bar graph and 90 to 94 for the line graph. 71 00:05:52,630 --> 00:05:57,570 So set your clock on 5 minutes and write your paragraph now. 72 00:05:57,580 --> 00:06:00,310 Then come back and compare it to what I've done. 73 00:06:03,900 --> 00:06:04,470 Okay. 74 00:06:04,470 --> 00:06:07,020 So here is my fourth paragraph. 75 00:06:11,940 --> 00:06:19,980 An analysis of 1990 to 1992 discloses how worldwide voyages slipped, slightly dipped and then reach 76 00:06:19,980 --> 00:06:21,630 to just under 12 million. 77 00:06:21,870 --> 00:06:27,540 During the same juncture, the Australian market share expanded to more or less 5.5 million. 78 00:06:29,260 --> 00:06:37,900 As a final comparison point from 1993 to 1995, world trips rocketed to around to round about 15 million. 79 00:06:38,200 --> 00:06:46,270 However, from 1993 to 1994, Australian vacations modestly improved to faintly above 6%, and that 80 00:06:46,270 --> 00:06:48,580 failed to precisely 6%. 81 00:06:50,710 --> 00:07:00,160 So look at the language like it's always great to let a reader know what you're talking about, what 82 00:07:00,160 --> 00:07:01,990 time period you're talking about. 83 00:07:01,990 --> 00:07:04,960 So they know I'm talking about nineties and 92 here. 84 00:07:05,470 --> 00:07:10,510 Here they know I'm talking about 93 to 95 and 93 to 94. 85 00:07:12,830 --> 00:07:18,410 Using great cohesion language during the same juncture lets the reader know I'm still talking about 86 00:07:18,410 --> 00:07:19,520 this time period. 87 00:07:20,300 --> 00:07:22,490 Here's great location work. 88 00:07:22,520 --> 00:07:25,070 Slightly dipped and then reached. 89 00:07:26,460 --> 00:07:27,350 Expand it. 90 00:07:27,390 --> 00:07:31,320 That's another way of saying increased roundabout. 91 00:07:31,320 --> 00:07:32,910 That means approximately. 92 00:07:34,580 --> 00:07:34,880 Here. 93 00:07:34,880 --> 00:07:37,010 We're using a complex sentence form. 94 00:07:38,030 --> 00:07:40,880 Modestly improved faintly above. 95 00:07:42,100 --> 00:07:44,710 That's another way of saying what slightly above. 96 00:07:45,190 --> 00:07:47,080 That's also a great collocation. 97 00:07:47,080 --> 00:07:52,150 Collocations are combinations of words that are put together the right kind of way. 98 00:07:54,040 --> 00:07:56,230 So how did you do? 99 00:07:56,260 --> 00:07:59,220 Compare what you wrote to what I wrote. 100 00:07:59,230 --> 00:07:59,440 Now. 101 00:07:59,490 --> 00:08:07,360 Now, like I said, if you wrote it using the same information that I did, you can really see how you 102 00:08:07,360 --> 00:08:09,040 could have improved your writing. 103 00:08:09,070 --> 00:08:13,930 What kind of language do you need to add in to your writing to increase your score? 104 00:08:14,630 --> 00:08:19,280 That's why you want to look at my examples and look at your examples so you can look at how you can 105 00:08:19,280 --> 00:08:22,130 improve, because that's what I want for you. 106 00:08:24,890 --> 00:08:32,180 Here is the full two charts report, the introduction, the general overview. 107 00:08:34,220 --> 00:08:41,600 The third paragraph, the first specific body paragraph and the fourth paragraph, the second specific 108 00:08:41,600 --> 00:08:42,860 body paragraph. 109 00:08:43,040 --> 00:08:44,840 That is a complete report. 110 00:08:45,410 --> 00:08:48,860 Notice my word count is only 190 words. 111 00:08:51,250 --> 00:08:51,570 Okay. 112 00:08:51,610 --> 00:08:56,860 So coming up next, we're going to get into the diagram map. 113 00:08:57,790 --> 00:09:02,800 We're going to go over scanning it, analyzing it and applying the strategy. 114 00:09:03,820 --> 00:09:05,920 Thank you so much for joining me. 115 00:09:05,950 --> 00:09:07,870 Have a fantastic day.