Thank you so much for joining me again in this lecture.
We're going to complete our two different charts before.
In the previous lecture, we wrote the introduction and general overview, and now we're going to move
forward with writing the specific detailed paragraphs.
Remember, with specific details, it's about the details, the numbers, the differences, the similarities
to paragraphs.
5 minutes for each paragraph, 2 to 3 sentences for each paragraph.
However, I really believe you should try to write three sentences.
If you write three sentences, three sentences for each of these specific detailed paragraphs, you're
going to get a much better task achievement score.
So here we're dealing with the two chart style.
The bar graph is at the top, the line graph is at the bottom.
So for now, as you know, what I'm doing is I'm breaking it down in between 85 to 87 and then talking
about 87 to 1990.
And I'm doing the same for the line graph, 85 to 87 and 87 to 1990.
So this information from 85 to 90, this information for the bar graph and line graph.
I'm going to talk about both in my third paragraph.
I'm going to talk about both in my third paragraph and then for my fourth paragraph from 90 to 92 and
92 to 95 or 93 to 95.
And the same for the line graph 90 all the way to 94.
All of this information from 92, 95, 90 to 94.
I'm going to talk about together in the fourth paragraph.
I'm going to make direct comparisons.
Because a lot of students don't know how to do that.
Now, I know some of you are going to write the bar graph in one in paragraph three, and the line graph
in paragraph four.
That's fine.
But you know what?
When they give you two different graphs of charts and they give you the same time periods they want
you to compare.
So that's what I'm going to do.
So go ahead and set your clock for 5 minutes, central clock for 5 minutes.
And if you want to write the same way, I'm going to write it.
You want to talk about from 85 to 1994, the third paragraph.
You're going to include the information for the bar graph and line graph.
So go ahead, stop the lecture and write your third paragraph now.
Then come back and compare it to mine.
Okay.
Here's my third paragraph.
Now, the 1990, the 1985 to 1987, specific details reveal that worldwide tourism declined by around
2 million, while the particular trips to Australia marginally increased by 2% during this period.
So first I talked about 85 to 87.
Right.
5 to 7, roughly.
Right.
So that's why I see it by around.
I don't have it specific enough, so I have to use information that's similar to approximately or about.
Then we're using a.
Complex sentence and with Australia marginally increased, as we have saying, small increase of going
from 2 million going up or going up roughly about 2%.
From here to here.
And this one is more exact.
I was right on the line so I can say I can see a 2% increase.
So we've covered 85 to 87, 85 to 87.
Next from 1987 to 1990.
Now we're moving 87 to 90, 87 to 90.
Global travel continue to increase by approximately 4 million.
But for Australia, Japanese citizen voyages first edged up by 1% and then slightly scaled back to just
above 4%.
So from 87 to 90 right here, we went from five to roughly.
Let's see, we went from I'm sorry, 87, seven, I'm sorry, seven to roughly 11.
We increased and then from for the Australia chart we went up by 1%.
And then we dipped to just above 4%.
Right.
We dipped to just above 4%.
So what we're looking at here is a way of comparing the two charts against each other.
The two charts against each other.
So look at your paragraph and compare it to what I've done.
Now let's go ahead and move to the fourth specific details paragraph.
Now we're going from 90 to 95 for the bar graph and 90 to 94 for the line graph.
So set your clock on 5 minutes and write your paragraph now.
Then come back and compare it to what I've done.
Okay.
So here is my fourth paragraph.
An analysis of 1990 to 1992 discloses how worldwide voyages slipped, slightly dipped and then reach
to just under 12 million.
During the same juncture, the Australian market share expanded to more or less 5.5 million.
As a final comparison point from 1993 to 1995, world trips rocketed to around to round about 15 million.
However, from 1993 to 1994, Australian vacations modestly improved to faintly above 6%, and that
failed to precisely 6%.
So look at the language like it's always great to let a reader know what you're talking about, what
time period you're talking about.
So they know I'm talking about nineties and 92 here.
Here they know I'm talking about 93 to 95 and 93 to 94.
Using great cohesion language during the same juncture lets the reader know I'm still talking about
this time period.
Here's great location work.
Slightly dipped and then reached.
Expand it.
That's another way of saying increased roundabout.
That means approximately.
Here.
We're using a complex sentence form.
Modestly improved faintly above.
That's another way of saying what slightly above.
That's also a great collocation.
Collocations are combinations of words that are put together the right kind of way.
So how did you do?
Compare what you wrote to what I wrote.
Now.
Now, like I said, if you wrote it using the same information that I did, you can really see how you
could have improved your writing.
What kind of language do you need to add in to your writing to increase your score?
That's why you want to look at my examples and look at your examples so you can look at how you can
improve, because that's what I want for you.
Here is the full two charts report, the introduction, the general overview.
The third paragraph, the first specific body paragraph and the fourth paragraph, the second specific
body paragraph.
That is a complete report.
Notice my word count is only 190 words.
Okay.
So coming up next, we're going to get into the diagram map.
We're going to go over scanning it, analyzing it and applying the strategy.
Thank you so much for joining me.
Have a fantastic day.