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In this lecture, we're going to cover how to write discussion point paragraphs, so each discussion

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point gets its own paragraph.

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And in this lecture, I'm going to show you exactly how to do it.

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So let's go ahead and get started with writing discussion points.

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The general letter, body, paragraph.

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All right.

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So let's talk about discussion point writing.

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First of all, you want to make sure that you review your outline before you start writing the discussion

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points.

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Remind yourself of the ideas that you're going to talk about.

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This will help you stay focused and make sure you stay within the confines of the discussion point.

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You want to make sure you create a proper topic sentence.

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You should always mention in the very beginning of a discussion point paragraph what you're going to

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be talking about or addressing in this paragraph.

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And then make sure that the details support that controlling idea.

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Finally you have three discussion point paragraphs.

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You have an introduction point one paragraph, point two, paragraph, 0.3 paragraph, and then a conclusion.

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A reminder on time management for each discussion point, you're going to spend 4 to 5 minutes.

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So when you're at home and practicing, it's important that you practice under time conditions.

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You could either start off doing it paragraph by paragraph, set their timer on 4 minutes and write

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your first discussion point, then set your timer on 4 minutes again and write the second discussion

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point and repeat that process for the third.

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And then once you get good at being able to write a discussion point within that time structure, then

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set your timer maybe on 12 or 15 minutes and write all three at the same time.

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Here's a reminder of our structure.

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Introduction 1 to 2 sentences.

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Discussion point number one 2 to 3 sentences.

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For me, I always write three sentences.

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I think that helps to make sure I'm meeting the word count and doing a great job on my task achievement

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or task development.

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So let's work together.

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You're going to write with me in terms of producing great discussion point body paragraphs.

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I want you to set your timer for 12 to 15 minutes.

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If you are an experienced writer, you should be able to write all three discussion point paragraphs

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in 12 minutes.

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If you're a beginner, set it on 15 minutes.

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You want to review your outline, your outline, or if you want, you can use my outline.

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It'll be better if you use mine because then you can compare your body paragraphs directly to what I'm

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doing.

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Then write your own body paragraphs and like I said, compare them.

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So let's go ahead and get started now.

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It's up to you to control the clock.

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Right.

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You have to control the clock.

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So when it's time to write the body paragraphs, stop the lecture and then write your body paragraphs.

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Then start the lecture and compare.

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Compare to what I did.

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So here is our first one.

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You already know the introduction is still there.

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This well considered letter regards your erroneous thought towards shutting the doors of our regional

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sports and leisure facility.

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The only difference with the introduction is I took out the word beloved.

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I think that we probably should leave out that emotional language.

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So that's the only difference is I took out the word beloved and this is what a proper introduction

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would read like.

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So now go ahead and set your timer on 12 to 15 minutes and write your discussion point one paragraph,

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discussion, point to paragraph and discussion point three paragraph.

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You could begin writing now.

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Okay.

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If you've been timing yourself, it's been 15 minutes.

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And now we're going to go ahead and show you what I wrote for each discussion point.

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So here is my first discussion point, and you can see here that I have the controlling idea.

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The first discussion point is why it's important for members of my family in yellow, I'm highlighting

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the sentence structures, I'm using correlative conjunctions, and that is a higher level of writing

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that will really impress the examiners if you do it correctly.

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And then we move down to the next discussion point as an additional point to reject closure.

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You should recall how the sports facility integrates the community.

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So now I'm talking about why it's important for the local community.

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Due to our geographical weather.

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Snow and ice subsists for four months a year and the centre remains the only winter leisure activity

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option even more.

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That's my connecting language as a gymnasium embodies a meeting place for the community that promotes

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connections and strengthens our neighborhood.

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And then the third discussion point and here we're talking about.

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In terms of the effects on the local community.

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If you proceed to see sports facility operations, we will lose a treasured gem that negatively impacts

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all residents.

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So I'm going to talk about the impact on all residents.

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Now I'm starting off with a conditional sentence.

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So really, I'm trying to show you different ways of starting sentences and different sentence types.

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That's how you score seven plus.

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Also, here's an introduction.

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Please take these points in mind when pondering the closing of the Sports and Leisure Facility.

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That's it for the.

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That's it for the conclusion.

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That's it for the conclusion.

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There's nothing more than that.

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Here is our next example.

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There's the introduction.

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We wrote it before.

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Now, what I want you to do is go ahead and set your timer on 12 to 15 minutes.

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Stop the lecture.

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If you if you're going to use my outline, here's my outline right here.

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You can see my outline at the bottom.

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You can use my outline or you can use your own.

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But if you want to be able to compare to what I'm doing, you might want to use my outline.

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Okay, so let's go ahead and write your body paragraph or discussion points right now.

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Begin.

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OC.

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And here's a look at what I did.

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Let's start with an introduction.

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I practiced law and will resettle in Istanbul with my lovely wife, Dr. Gauntlett, and three beautiful

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children aged ten, 12 and 16.

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We participate in kayaking, cycling, tennis and baseball, so we consider ourselves a very active

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family.

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There's an introduction.

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I did exactly what I'm supposed to do.

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Introduce myself and my family.

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Second discussion point the type of accommodation moving on to the heart of the matter.

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We need numerous factors satisfied with the Istanbul rental property.

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Without question, we must acquire a two storey villa that possesses five bedrooms, laundry connections,

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indoor spa and three bathrooms.

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Besides these attributes, there is connecting language.

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My wife considers herself a professional gardener, and thus the house should hold a large backyard

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backyard for agricultural purposes.

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Now, you might be asking yourself, you use the language moving on to the heart of the matter.

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That's really that's really business language.

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And this is more of a business letter.

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This is a semi-formal letter.

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And so I can do that.

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I can use I could use business jargon.

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Okay.

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I could use business jargon, but I'm not going to use colloquial language.

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There's a difference.

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The third body paragraph is talking about the preference for location.

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The word accommodation should really not be there because we addressed it in the second point.

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Really, we're talking about preference for location here.

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As Istanbul newcomers, we will lean on your assistance in discovering the perfect neighbourhood location.

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More specifically, we hope you can secure a house in a neighborhood surrounded by kid friendly parks

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facilities for the above reference activities and top rated schools.

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There we have a really good use of parallel parallelism.

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Lastly, the suburbs present less aesthetic appeal.

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We prefer an inner city residents conclusion.

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We hold high expectations and hope you can secure the accommodations for our relocation.

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Sincere thanks, John Smith.

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All right.

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Let's move on to the next example.

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Here.

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This is the one about missing your friend's birthday party.

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You're going to apologize for missing the birthday celebration.

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Explain why you missed it and didn't tell your friend.

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Say what you would like to do to say you are sorry.

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Here's the plan below.

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You can use my plan or you can make your own.

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But for comparison purposes, you might want to use my plan.

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Here is the introduction that was written previously.

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And the first body paragraph.

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Anyway, I'm feeling a bit down and want to express from the depths of my heart how sorry I am to have

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not attended your born day and created lifetime memories together.

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I should have told you that I wouldn't make it because our friendship deserves that notification.

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I've been down in the dumps about my celebration, absence and beg your forgiveness.

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There you can see a lot more colloquial language down in the dumps.

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Create a lifetime memories.

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The depths of my heart.

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Right.

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But everything is only about me apologizing.

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Me apologizing.

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I'm not going to talk about why or say what I would like to do.

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Each discussion point gets its own paragraph.

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And there you have the second body paragraph.

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And here you can see in blue what I'm highlighting in blue is I'm highlighting for you the discussion

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points, the controlling ideas, so that the person reading the letter knows this is what we're going

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to talk about in this letter.

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In this in this paragraph, this is what we're going to talk about.

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In this paragraph.

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We're going to talk about my actions deserving an explanation.

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And then we have the third.

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The third.

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Discussion, point, paragraph, and here I'm going to talk about what I would like to do.

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I'll start off telling him the party's not over.

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That's the indication that I'm going to do something.

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There's something that I want to do.

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Here you can see I'm using a complex sentence.

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Here, I'm showing you how to use a compound, complex sentence.

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And here I'm using a complex sentence.

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So again, showing quality, showing organization, coherence.

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This is how you want to be able to write.