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Okay.

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Let's go ahead and move into discussion point writing.

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Step number two.

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Remember, you have your time already, have your paper ready and be ready to write your body paragraphs.

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Now before we get started.

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I want to say something about the introduction earlier in the previous lecture about about introductions.

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I told you don't mention the information from your from the discussion points.

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And what I was really talking about there was don't discuss the information.

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I want to be clear about that.

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Don't discuss the details.

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Don't discuss the information.

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However, if you want to mention the discussion points as controlling ideas in your introduction, that

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is perfectly fine.

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And so I wanted to take an opportunity to rewrite this introduction and show you how to include the

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discussion points as controlling ideas stated in the introduction, which is perfectly fine.

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We're just not going to really get into the discussion points explaining them and supporting them.

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I know you usually don't hear from me.

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However, today I must inform you of the severe and debilitating problems resulting from my desktop

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PC, along with the impact on my work and solutions I propose.

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Right.

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And that's where you have a strong introduction where we are mentioning the discussion points as controlling

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ideas, and that's perfectly fine.

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Okay.

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So now go ahead and set your timer on 15 minutes or 12 minutes.

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If you really want to push yourself, stop the lecture and write your body paragraphs right now.

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OC and here are here is my result.

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Here is my first body paragraph.

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The words that I have in green are subject specific vocabulary.

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That's what you want to be able to do.

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I'm showing you again a correlative sentence.

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In the beginning, I showed you a complex sentence and you can see that the controlling idea is present.

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I wanted to talk about problems.

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In my next body paragraph, I'm going to talk about how it affects my employment, the controlling ideas

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there.

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Then I start off giving an example of how it affects my employment.

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Then I use the word this a reference pronoun linking language.

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Linking language.

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This drop in productivity, I'm linking this sentence to the previous sentence and I'm using a complex

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sentence form.

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Then I'm starting off with a great word, admittedly.

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And I give.

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I let them know I'm going to give suggestions.

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So the person reading knows exactly what I'm going to do in this body paragraph some secondary solutions.

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So I start off with some solution, and then I get some secondary solutions and some subject specific

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vocabulary, such as factory specifications.

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Then we have a conclusion to sum up my duties, demand and optimally condition computer.

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And I hope you respond quickly with appropriate action.

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This these three words together right here.

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Optimally conditioning computer.

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That's an example of a colorful collocation.

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Factory specifications collocation.

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One week extension collocation.

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So being able to write really great collocations helps to really improve your vocabulary score.

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Here's another example.

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And again, I rewrote the introduction to show you how to include the discussion points as controlling

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ideas.

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Right.

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I'm trying to make sure we have clarity, because you may have thought that in the introduction lecture

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that you can't mention controlling ideas.

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And what I really what I really was talking about was that you can't you don't discuss the you don't

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discuss those three key points.

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You don't go into detail.

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You don't explain them.

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He will.

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It's that time of year again when we have our annual get together.

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And this year we've decided on a traditional American picnic.

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So we need to discuss our program plans, arrangements and help need it.

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And really to be to be more accurate this should be we've.

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First body paragraph.

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I guess we need to first think about.

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Where the picnic should take place.

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So again, where where we plan to go, that's what we're going to talk about.

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I'm showing the ability to write a proper compound sentence.

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Moving on to other matters.

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Since it's my turn to decide, I've taken it upon myself to make some arrangements.

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Right.

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Again, we know exactly what we're going to talk about.

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I've checked the weather.

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I've also called the PA to confirm the entry fee.

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Now, here's some good connection language.

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Not only not only have I seen to these arrangements, but I even reserved a sweet spot next to the canyon

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in order.

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Lebanese food.

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Having completed my part, I just need a little bit of extra help.

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So again, the reader knows exactly what I'm going to talk about, exactly what I'm going to talk about.

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And if I were doing this one over, I would probably change that word arrangements to something else,

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to a synonym so that I can really increase my vocabulary score.

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And then we have a conclusion.

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That's it.

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We all know the plan of action.

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So you guys soon.

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All the best, Big Mike.

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And here's our final one.

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Our final letter that we have to write.

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Here is the introduction.

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Go ahead and set your timer on 12 to 15 minutes.

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Stop the lecture and write your body paragraphs.

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Now.

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All right.

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And here is my result.

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Several challenges, disturbances and problems occur during the trip.

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So right away, you know what I'm going to talk about and I'm just showing a lot of synonym language.

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Each one is slightly different, but I'm showing I know all these synonyms and that's going to be very

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helpful for your vocabulary score.

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Faulty air conditioning, fragmented English.

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These are great collocations.

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I'm using a complex sentence and using correlative conjunctions.

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My next discussion point number two The words completely dissatisfied understate my extreme displeasure

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at your low performance standards.

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My profound disappointment, profound disappointment.

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Great collocation begins with the fact I needed this tour for research purposes on transportation operators.

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However complex sentence, your driver's low level English prevented any clear assessment connection

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language.

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Be that as it may, the company brochure indicates that all vehicles come with air conditioning, and

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our bus lacked this prerequisite.

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And then we have the third discussion point where I'm going to make three recommendations.

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So I think it's a really good idea to write your general letters the way that I'm trying to teach you

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how to write them.

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I think if you do it this way, you'll score an eight or nine every single time with your general letter.

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Of course, as long as you have high level grammar and vocabulary.

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All right.

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So thank you very much.

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I hope you now have a much better understanding of how to write the general letter discussion points.

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Have a fantastic day.

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Take care.