Okay.
Let's go ahead and move into discussion point writing.
Step number two.
Remember, you have your time already, have your paper ready and be ready to write your body paragraphs.
Now before we get started.
I want to say something about the introduction earlier in the previous lecture about about introductions.
I told you don't mention the information from your from the discussion points.
And what I was really talking about there was don't discuss the information.
I want to be clear about that.
Don't discuss the details.
Don't discuss the information.
However, if you want to mention the discussion points as controlling ideas in your introduction, that
is perfectly fine.
And so I wanted to take an opportunity to rewrite this introduction and show you how to include the
discussion points as controlling ideas stated in the introduction, which is perfectly fine.
We're just not going to really get into the discussion points explaining them and supporting them.
I know you usually don't hear from me.
However, today I must inform you of the severe and debilitating problems resulting from my desktop
PC, along with the impact on my work and solutions I propose.
Right.
And that's where you have a strong introduction where we are mentioning the discussion points as controlling
ideas, and that's perfectly fine.
Okay.
So now go ahead and set your timer on 15 minutes or 12 minutes.
If you really want to push yourself, stop the lecture and write your body paragraphs right now.
OC and here are here is my result.
Here is my first body paragraph.
The words that I have in green are subject specific vocabulary.
That's what you want to be able to do.
I'm showing you again a correlative sentence.
In the beginning, I showed you a complex sentence and you can see that the controlling idea is present.
I wanted to talk about problems.
In my next body paragraph, I'm going to talk about how it affects my employment, the controlling ideas
there.
Then I start off giving an example of how it affects my employment.
Then I use the word this a reference pronoun linking language.
Linking language.
This drop in productivity, I'm linking this sentence to the previous sentence and I'm using a complex
sentence form.
Then I'm starting off with a great word, admittedly.
And I give.
I let them know I'm going to give suggestions.
So the person reading knows exactly what I'm going to do in this body paragraph some secondary solutions.
So I start off with some solution, and then I get some secondary solutions and some subject specific
vocabulary, such as factory specifications.
Then we have a conclusion to sum up my duties, demand and optimally condition computer.
And I hope you respond quickly with appropriate action.
This these three words together right here.
Optimally conditioning computer.
That's an example of a colorful collocation.
Factory specifications collocation.
One week extension collocation.
So being able to write really great collocations helps to really improve your vocabulary score.
Here's another example.
And again, I rewrote the introduction to show you how to include the discussion points as controlling
ideas.
Right.
I'm trying to make sure we have clarity, because you may have thought that in the introduction lecture
that you can't mention controlling ideas.
And what I really what I really was talking about was that you can't you don't discuss the you don't
discuss those three key points.
You don't go into detail.
You don't explain them.
He will.
It's that time of year again when we have our annual get together.
And this year we've decided on a traditional American picnic.
So we need to discuss our program plans, arrangements and help need it.
And really to be to be more accurate this should be we've.
First body paragraph.
I guess we need to first think about.
Where the picnic should take place.
So again, where where we plan to go, that's what we're going to talk about.
I'm showing the ability to write a proper compound sentence.
Moving on to other matters.
Since it's my turn to decide, I've taken it upon myself to make some arrangements.
Right.
Again, we know exactly what we're going to talk about.
I've checked the weather.
I've also called the PA to confirm the entry fee.
Now, here's some good connection language.
Not only not only have I seen to these arrangements, but I even reserved a sweet spot next to the canyon
in order.
Lebanese food.
Having completed my part, I just need a little bit of extra help.
So again, the reader knows exactly what I'm going to talk about, exactly what I'm going to talk about.
And if I were doing this one over, I would probably change that word arrangements to something else,
to a synonym so that I can really increase my vocabulary score.
And then we have a conclusion.
That's it.
We all know the plan of action.
So you guys soon.
All the best, Big Mike.
And here's our final one.
Our final letter that we have to write.
Here is the introduction.
Go ahead and set your timer on 12 to 15 minutes.
Stop the lecture and write your body paragraphs.
Now.
All right.
And here is my result.
Several challenges, disturbances and problems occur during the trip.
So right away, you know what I'm going to talk about and I'm just showing a lot of synonym language.
Each one is slightly different, but I'm showing I know all these synonyms and that's going to be very
helpful for your vocabulary score.
Faulty air conditioning, fragmented English.
These are great collocations.
I'm using a complex sentence and using correlative conjunctions.
My next discussion point number two The words completely dissatisfied understate my extreme displeasure
at your low performance standards.
My profound disappointment, profound disappointment.
Great collocation begins with the fact I needed this tour for research purposes on transportation operators.
However complex sentence, your driver's low level English prevented any clear assessment connection
language.
Be that as it may, the company brochure indicates that all vehicles come with air conditioning, and
our bus lacked this prerequisite.
And then we have the third discussion point where I'm going to make three recommendations.
So I think it's a really good idea to write your general letters the way that I'm trying to teach you
how to write them.
I think if you do it this way, you'll score an eight or nine every single time with your general letter.
Of course, as long as you have high level grammar and vocabulary.
All right.
So thank you very much.
I hope you now have a much better understanding of how to write the general letter discussion points.
Have a fantastic day.
Take care.