Okay, everybody, we are now going to move into our final live recording.
This final live recording will be for a formal letter.
Again, not that I like to repeat myself, but I need to let everybody know that I'm writing this live.
And so what that means is there may not be a lot of talking, because I'm trying to demonstrate for
you the process of writing a letter from beginning to end the process.
So I'm not going to be able to write and stop and explain and write and stop and explain because I'm
going from beginning to end in section two of these lectures where you have the practice questions that
were already written and that I walked you through the application of theory.
That's where you had a lot of walking through and explaining.
This is about showing you a live progress and procession.
So let's please understand what's happening so you can completely understand.
All right.
So let's get started.
And we're going to write this live lecture.
We're going to I hope that it benefits you to be able to see the process of writing from beginning to
end so that you can duplicate and try to mimic this procedure.
All right.
So our question our question says, I guess let's get the let's get the size right so we can see.
Well, our question says, you did a bus tour with other people.
However, you were not satisfied with the bus service.
Write a letter to the bus company about your journey and say what the problem with the tour was while
you were not satisfied.
Suggest how the bus company can improve.
So we first, of course, do an outline.
Everybody, I know I've said it many times and I'll say it again.
Do a outline.
Part one What the problem is.
Let's talk about air conditioning.
Just talk about we're English.
And let's talk about fast driving.
Those are my problems I'm going to want to talk about.
All right.
And then we also have what are some other things I want to talk about for part number two, why was
I not satisfied?
I needed information.
Okay.
And the brochure claims.
And part three.
This is part two.
Part three solutions test for English.
And this is pre test the bus conditions.
All right.
So there we have our outline.
You want to be able to write out a quick outline.
Writing out a quick outline is going to really, really help you in terms of having organized thoughts,
structured thoughts, so you can focus on how to write.
So after that, we do our outline.
We're ready.
We know what we're going to talk about.
We know the order of our talking.
We know the progression.
We can move right into our complaint letter.
Right.
Regardless of the bus trip.
Christie took.
With your
professionally
recognized bus company.
Right.
That's my introduction sentence.
Now, if you notice, I'm not talking about part number one.
I'm not talking about the problems.
I'm not talking about why I wasn't satisfied.
I'm talking about my solutions that are suggested.
Right.
I'm not talking about that.
That doesn't belong here.
They were only talking about our introduction sentence.
Now I'm going to part number one.
Right.
So you get the idea from this opening sentence that I'm about to talk about the problems I had the problems
with the tour.
Right.
I have an introductory topic sentence that that's going to lay it all out.
Air conditioning was broken.
Conerly was the year.
Air conditioning.
44 also.
Your.
Conductor we want to show.
Good.
We can't.
We could say driver, but conductor is a better word.
Right there is our first part.
We talked about the problems.
Look at the sentence structures.
Everybody look at the use of look at my use of adverbs.
That's what you want to be able to look at.
We see three strong sentences.
I look at the level look at the level of the language being used.
All right.
Of course they
use broken English.
This time I'm inventing my paragraphs.
And actually people ask me sometimes, do I have to invent or do I do I have to?
Is it necessary?
You just have to be consistent with the letter.
Sometimes you can indent a letter and sometimes you can just not indent the letter.
So that's that's something that is an option.
The next part we have to talk about is why I was not satisfied.
Now here I'm going to use I was because really I have to say like why I was not satisfied.
So some people might say, well, you're using AI.
Well, yeah.
I mean, this this letter, the way it's structured, I have to use AI at some point because I'm talking
about my personal dissatisfaction.
All right.
However, look at my sentence.
Structure, everybody.
Right.
So there's our first sentence about about needing that information for research purposes and the driver's
poor English, preventing that from happening.
And then we're going to talk about our next idea, which is about the brochure.
Okay.
And there we have our next paragraph.
We have three strong sentences.
Write three strong sentences.
We have our part to talk about why.
And why I'm not satisfied.
Then everybody, we move into our part three about suggestions.
Actually, I think this comma, if I'm doing it right, it goes.
There.
I need to check on that.
There are three.
Recommendations.
That your bus company.
Now, if you see here in this sentence, I didn't say I think you should make three recommendations.
It's a formal letter.
So it's strong.
Not, I believe or I think you should make three recommendations.
There are right.
There are three things you should do.
Yes.
Use good language.
So use some good language here.
So that's my first solution.
To use a recognized English as Now you notice how when I'm writing, you might see me start with some
simple language.
But then I remember this is a formal letter.
I need to up the level of vocabulary, right?
I need to up and show the ability with the vocabulary.
Just use some good connecting language here, some good coherence language.
Pretest the.
What's a pretest?
The.
Air conditioning.
And the R.
The department should place a speed limit reminder for the drivers.
Right there we have our.
Next part.
Okay.
We need something there.
And now we need one more thing.
We need our conclusion.
All right.
And then we need our conclusion or conclusion and we need our sign off.
Bob Williams.
All right.
So let's look at look let's take a look at our our language, our word count.
We're at 224, right?
So that's what a formal letter looks like.
That was a live letter.
There are probably some things I might change here and there, but when you're doing a live letter,
that's what you want.
That's what you this is how it is.
You have to go through it in a live session.
One take.
But I hope that you really, really got the idea of what you need to do to do a great job on the aisles.
General Letter, thank you so much for joining me and going through these lectures.
I hope you know now what to do.
I'm going to set up a couple of test questions for you guys to practice with and submit for other students
to take a look at.
So I'll set that up for you.
But at any rate, thanks a lot for participating and I look forward to helping you on your journey for
your getting a super high score.
So take care and I'll talk to you soon.