1 00:00:00,570 --> 00:00:05,310 Okay, everybody, we are now going to move into our final live recording. 2 00:00:05,910 --> 00:00:08,940 This final live recording will be for a formal letter. 3 00:00:09,570 --> 00:00:16,950 Again, not that I like to repeat myself, but I need to let everybody know that I'm writing this live. 4 00:00:16,980 --> 00:00:22,350 And so what that means is there may not be a lot of talking, because I'm trying to demonstrate for 5 00:00:22,350 --> 00:00:28,140 you the process of writing a letter from beginning to end the process. 6 00:00:28,860 --> 00:00:36,150 So I'm not going to be able to write and stop and explain and write and stop and explain because I'm 7 00:00:36,150 --> 00:00:48,960 going from beginning to end in section two of these lectures where you have the practice questions that 8 00:00:48,960 --> 00:00:52,870 were already written and that I walked you through the application of theory. 9 00:00:52,890 --> 00:00:55,900 That's where you had a lot of walking through and explaining. 10 00:00:55,920 --> 00:01:01,920 This is about showing you a live progress and procession. 11 00:01:02,970 --> 00:01:06,900 So let's please understand what's happening so you can completely understand. 12 00:01:07,020 --> 00:01:07,440 All right. 13 00:01:07,440 --> 00:01:09,150 So let's get started. 14 00:01:09,150 --> 00:01:11,280 And we're going to write this live lecture. 15 00:01:12,510 --> 00:01:19,350 We're going to I hope that it benefits you to be able to see the process of writing from beginning to 16 00:01:19,350 --> 00:01:25,740 end so that you can duplicate and try to mimic this procedure. 17 00:01:27,030 --> 00:01:27,360 All right. 18 00:01:27,360 --> 00:01:38,280 So our question our question says, I guess let's get the let's get the size right so we can see. 19 00:01:38,280 --> 00:01:43,170 Well, our question says, you did a bus tour with other people. 20 00:01:43,290 --> 00:01:46,440 However, you were not satisfied with the bus service. 21 00:01:46,740 --> 00:01:52,830 Write a letter to the bus company about your journey and say what the problem with the tour was while 22 00:01:52,830 --> 00:01:54,130 you were not satisfied. 23 00:01:54,150 --> 00:01:57,210 Suggest how the bus company can improve. 24 00:01:58,890 --> 00:02:01,960 So we first, of course, do an outline. 25 00:02:01,980 --> 00:02:07,860 Everybody, I know I've said it many times and I'll say it again. 26 00:02:07,890 --> 00:02:10,170 Do a outline. 27 00:02:12,300 --> 00:02:16,290 Part one What the problem is. 28 00:02:17,910 --> 00:02:19,950 Let's talk about air conditioning. 29 00:02:21,390 --> 00:02:24,060 Just talk about we're English. 30 00:02:26,620 --> 00:02:28,910 And let's talk about fast driving. 31 00:02:28,930 --> 00:02:31,660 Those are my problems I'm going to want to talk about. 32 00:02:36,960 --> 00:02:37,470 All right. 33 00:02:37,470 --> 00:02:44,910 And then we also have what are some other things I want to talk about for part number two, why was 34 00:02:44,910 --> 00:02:46,350 I not satisfied? 35 00:02:47,670 --> 00:02:51,930 I needed information. 36 00:02:56,850 --> 00:02:57,740 Okay. 37 00:02:59,430 --> 00:03:03,210 And the brochure claims. 38 00:03:05,070 --> 00:03:07,170 And part three. 39 00:03:08,250 --> 00:03:10,440 This is part two. 40 00:03:11,880 --> 00:03:17,460 Part three solutions test for English. 41 00:03:21,210 --> 00:03:26,940 And this is pre test the bus conditions. 42 00:03:27,690 --> 00:03:27,900 All right. 43 00:03:27,900 --> 00:03:29,310 So there we have our outline. 44 00:03:30,060 --> 00:03:32,670 You want to be able to write out a quick outline. 45 00:03:32,850 --> 00:03:40,080 Writing out a quick outline is going to really, really help you in terms of having organized thoughts, 46 00:03:40,080 --> 00:03:43,260 structured thoughts, so you can focus on how to write. 47 00:03:43,350 --> 00:03:45,670 So after that, we do our outline. 48 00:03:45,690 --> 00:03:46,560 We're ready. 49 00:03:46,560 --> 00:03:48,330 We know what we're going to talk about. 50 00:03:48,360 --> 00:03:50,190 We know the order of our talking. 51 00:03:50,190 --> 00:03:51,540 We know the progression. 52 00:03:51,540 --> 00:03:54,030 We can move right into our complaint letter. 53 00:03:54,790 --> 00:03:55,350 Right. 54 00:04:13,960 --> 00:04:16,440 Regardless of the bus trip. 55 00:04:23,570 --> 00:04:24,770 Christie took. 56 00:04:25,430 --> 00:04:26,570 With your 57 00:04:29,240 --> 00:04:30,470 professionally 58 00:04:32,870 --> 00:04:36,200 recognized bus company. 59 00:04:36,770 --> 00:04:37,130 Right. 60 00:04:37,130 --> 00:04:39,350 That's my introduction sentence. 61 00:04:39,890 --> 00:04:44,000 Now, if you notice, I'm not talking about part number one. 62 00:04:44,000 --> 00:04:45,800 I'm not talking about the problems. 63 00:04:45,800 --> 00:04:48,020 I'm not talking about why I wasn't satisfied. 64 00:04:48,100 --> 00:04:51,710 I'm talking about my solutions that are suggested. 65 00:04:52,190 --> 00:04:52,820 Right. 66 00:04:53,630 --> 00:04:55,370 I'm not talking about that. 67 00:04:55,520 --> 00:04:57,170 That doesn't belong here. 68 00:04:57,200 --> 00:05:00,680 They were only talking about our introduction sentence. 69 00:05:00,800 --> 00:05:02,900 Now I'm going to part number one. 70 00:05:50,390 --> 00:05:51,040 Right. 71 00:05:51,050 --> 00:05:57,440 So you get the idea from this opening sentence that I'm about to talk about the problems I had the problems 72 00:05:57,440 --> 00:05:58,310 with the tour. 73 00:05:58,590 --> 00:05:58,990 Right. 74 00:05:59,000 --> 00:06:02,990 I have an introductory topic sentence that that's going to lay it all out. 75 00:06:49,220 --> 00:06:55,490 Air conditioning was broken. 76 00:07:00,710 --> 00:07:03,970 Conerly was the year. 77 00:07:06,670 --> 00:07:08,980 Air conditioning. 78 00:07:10,790 --> 00:07:14,150 44 also. 79 00:07:16,190 --> 00:07:16,970 Your. 80 00:07:20,610 --> 00:07:21,850 Conductor we want to show. 81 00:07:21,870 --> 00:07:22,320 Good. 82 00:07:22,710 --> 00:07:23,040 We can't. 83 00:07:23,040 --> 00:07:27,420 We could say driver, but conductor is a better word. 84 00:07:50,660 --> 00:07:53,870 Right there is our first part. 85 00:07:54,380 --> 00:07:56,090 We talked about the problems. 86 00:07:56,090 --> 00:07:57,620 Look at the sentence structures. 87 00:07:57,620 --> 00:08:02,180 Everybody look at the use of look at my use of adverbs. 88 00:08:04,220 --> 00:08:05,930 That's what you want to be able to look at. 89 00:08:06,350 --> 00:08:09,320 We see three strong sentences. 90 00:08:10,640 --> 00:08:14,150 I look at the level look at the level of the language being used. 91 00:08:16,400 --> 00:08:17,000 All right. 92 00:08:21,460 --> 00:08:22,360 Of course they 93 00:08:25,130 --> 00:08:26,770 use broken English. 94 00:08:27,040 --> 00:08:30,730 This time I'm inventing my paragraphs. 95 00:08:30,730 --> 00:08:35,260 And actually people ask me sometimes, do I have to invent or do I do I have to? 96 00:08:35,270 --> 00:08:36,200 Is it necessary? 97 00:08:36,220 --> 00:08:38,530 You just have to be consistent with the letter. 98 00:08:38,710 --> 00:08:44,080 Sometimes you can indent a letter and sometimes you can just not indent the letter. 99 00:08:44,080 --> 00:08:47,440 So that's that's something that is an option. 100 00:08:48,220 --> 00:08:51,430 The next part we have to talk about is why I was not satisfied. 101 00:09:38,610 --> 00:09:44,110 Now here I'm going to use I was because really I have to say like why I was not satisfied. 102 00:09:44,130 --> 00:09:46,350 So some people might say, well, you're using AI. 103 00:09:46,380 --> 00:09:46,920 Well, yeah. 104 00:09:46,920 --> 00:09:52,770 I mean, this this letter, the way it's structured, I have to use AI at some point because I'm talking 105 00:09:52,770 --> 00:09:55,920 about my personal dissatisfaction. 106 00:10:12,820 --> 00:10:13,420 All right. 107 00:10:52,700 --> 00:10:55,880 However, look at my sentence. 108 00:10:55,880 --> 00:10:57,140 Structure, everybody. 109 00:11:20,800 --> 00:11:20,940 Right. 110 00:11:21,070 --> 00:11:28,900 So there's our first sentence about about needing that information for research purposes and the driver's 111 00:11:28,900 --> 00:11:31,120 poor English, preventing that from happening. 112 00:11:32,230 --> 00:11:35,590 And then we're going to talk about our next idea, which is about the brochure. 113 00:12:34,880 --> 00:12:35,500 Okay. 114 00:12:35,570 --> 00:12:38,120 And there we have our next paragraph. 115 00:12:38,120 --> 00:12:40,580 We have three strong sentences. 116 00:12:41,540 --> 00:12:44,030 Write three strong sentences. 117 00:12:45,470 --> 00:12:48,500 We have our part to talk about why. 118 00:12:48,540 --> 00:12:50,210 And why I'm not satisfied. 119 00:12:50,240 --> 00:12:54,500 Then everybody, we move into our part three about suggestions. 120 00:12:59,610 --> 00:13:04,650 Actually, I think this comma, if I'm doing it right, it goes. 121 00:13:07,510 --> 00:13:08,190 There. 122 00:13:09,340 --> 00:13:10,390 I need to check on that. 123 00:13:13,210 --> 00:13:14,620 There are three. 124 00:13:18,270 --> 00:13:19,830 Recommendations. 125 00:13:23,210 --> 00:13:26,150 That your bus company. 126 00:13:26,160 --> 00:13:31,460 Now, if you see here in this sentence, I didn't say I think you should make three recommendations. 127 00:13:31,460 --> 00:13:32,570 It's a formal letter. 128 00:13:32,570 --> 00:13:33,830 So it's strong. 129 00:13:33,950 --> 00:13:37,250 Not, I believe or I think you should make three recommendations. 130 00:13:37,250 --> 00:13:39,110 There are right. 131 00:13:39,110 --> 00:13:41,090 There are three things you should do. 132 00:14:02,630 --> 00:14:02,870 Yes. 133 00:14:02,870 --> 00:14:04,730 Use good language. 134 00:14:06,710 --> 00:14:08,270 So use some good language here. 135 00:14:41,090 --> 00:14:42,790 So that's my first solution. 136 00:14:42,830 --> 00:14:48,380 To use a recognized English as Now you notice how when I'm writing, you might see me start with some 137 00:14:48,380 --> 00:14:49,160 simple language. 138 00:14:49,160 --> 00:14:51,080 But then I remember this is a formal letter. 139 00:14:51,080 --> 00:14:55,060 I need to up the level of vocabulary, right? 140 00:14:55,100 --> 00:14:58,580 I need to up and show the ability with the vocabulary. 141 00:15:21,580 --> 00:15:28,450 Just use some good connecting language here, some good coherence language. 142 00:15:45,730 --> 00:15:48,070 Pretest the. 143 00:15:52,610 --> 00:15:53,740 What's a pretest? 144 00:15:53,750 --> 00:15:54,530 The. 145 00:15:57,950 --> 00:15:59,330 Air conditioning. 146 00:16:04,140 --> 00:16:06,120 And the R. 147 00:16:10,600 --> 00:16:21,780 The department should place a speed limit reminder for the drivers. 148 00:16:22,620 --> 00:16:24,750 Right there we have our. 149 00:16:27,160 --> 00:16:28,360 Next part. 150 00:16:32,010 --> 00:16:32,650 Okay. 151 00:16:38,370 --> 00:16:40,440 We need something there. 152 00:16:43,720 --> 00:16:45,330 And now we need one more thing. 153 00:16:45,370 --> 00:16:46,870 We need our conclusion. 154 00:17:14,990 --> 00:17:16,050 All right. 155 00:17:16,190 --> 00:17:25,280 And then we need our conclusion or conclusion and we need our sign off. 156 00:17:32,110 --> 00:17:33,010 Bob Williams. 157 00:17:33,010 --> 00:17:33,580 All right. 158 00:17:33,700 --> 00:17:42,040 So let's look at look let's take a look at our our language, our word count. 159 00:17:42,550 --> 00:17:45,340 We're at 224, right? 160 00:17:45,940 --> 00:17:49,390 So that's what a formal letter looks like. 161 00:17:49,390 --> 00:17:50,830 That was a live letter. 162 00:17:51,100 --> 00:17:56,260 There are probably some things I might change here and there, but when you're doing a live letter, 163 00:17:56,260 --> 00:17:57,010 that's what you want. 164 00:17:57,010 --> 00:17:58,930 That's what you this is how it is. 165 00:17:58,930 --> 00:18:00,970 You have to go through it in a live session. 166 00:18:00,970 --> 00:18:01,960 One take. 167 00:18:03,460 --> 00:18:12,310 But I hope that you really, really got the idea of what you need to do to do a great job on the aisles. 168 00:18:12,310 --> 00:18:19,030 General Letter, thank you so much for joining me and going through these lectures. 169 00:18:19,030 --> 00:18:21,280 I hope you know now what to do. 170 00:18:22,540 --> 00:18:30,790 I'm going to set up a couple of test questions for you guys to practice with and submit for other students 171 00:18:30,790 --> 00:18:31,870 to take a look at. 172 00:18:32,320 --> 00:18:34,900 So I'll set that up for you. 173 00:18:34,900 --> 00:18:44,320 But at any rate, thanks a lot for participating and I look forward to helping you on your journey for 174 00:18:44,320 --> 00:18:47,830 your getting a super high score. 175 00:18:47,830 --> 00:18:50,020 So take care and I'll talk to you soon.