By no more border.
Pablo.
Someone.
No more borders, chaos and anarchy.
Yeah, Pablo.
Yeah.
Yeah, I guess somebody could.
You know, if somebody read this, they would think that.
But the goal when I when I wrote the position, Pablo, was I said, I'm going to write.
You know, this side is the most fun side for me to write about.
This side is the side that I have the most ideas about.
This side is the one that I can express and have fun expressing.
Doesn't have to be my position could be the easiest thing.
Yes.
Your opinion can be made up.
Yeah.
I mean, it's depended on how many advantages and disadvantages.
I mean, I would write about I wouldn't, I would write more than one, you know what I mean?
I would not I would try to write more than one.
Somebody asked me the question, Hey, when you all are asking your questions, ask your questions to
the whole group.
Right.
Because some of you are asking some of you are asking me general questions about this.
And it's important.
It's important for everybody to be able to see your question.
So ask your question to the whole group, please.
Do the Raiders have bias and give a higher rank for us?
No, they don't.
They're not supposed to.
I'll put it this way.
They're not supposed to.
They're trained not to.
Sienna.
I tend to go first expressing the side that I'm not in favor of and then going into the side that I
am in favor of.
Right.
So if you could see Xena in this in this essay I wrote, I expressed what the expressed the downsides
first, because I don't agree with them.
I express what they were.
And then I destroyed them right by me expressing them and then destroying them.
That's making my argument stronger.
It's explaining why the advantages outweigh more.
And then I go into expressing about the advantages, the strength, you know, strengthening my argument
more about expressing the advantages than why they're more important.
What is the meaning of range?
Range?
Range is what I just showed you.
You see everything in peach?
That's an example of range.
Price range ranges.
Ranges.
Not repeating the same words over and over and over and over and over again.
Range is shown using subject specific vocabulary related to the essay topic.
Range is writing a variety of sentence structures.
Range is using different types of transitions, not the same transitions over and over and over again.
All of that is range.
Just explicit about range.
Paraphrase.
Use synonyms.
Stop repeating the same words.
You don't you don't express if the advantages if the advantages outweigh the disadvantages and the conclusion.
I've said that like ten times now in the paragraph.
The author.
Right.
The author, which is me.
I wrote this.
The author is expressing whether it outweighs if the advantages outweigh the disadvantages inside the
paragraph.
Right inside the paragraph that's being expressed.
That's what that language in Orange is telling you.
It's expressing it right inside the paragraph.
A conclusion does not introduce an opinion.
It does not introduce if it outweighs or not.
Okay.
I'm moving forward.
Hold your questions, please.
Right now.
We're going to see the same thing here.
And like I said, this is more for those that are doing the general exam, discuss the advantages and
disadvantages and give your opinion.
Many teenagers now have their own smartphone.
Now you can see this on the academic test.
You can see this on the academic test also.
Right.
You can see it on the academic test also.
Many teenagers now have their own smartphones, discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your
opinion.
We're going to discuss the advantages.
Point out the advantages, give an opinion on the advantages they were going to discuss the advantages,
point out the disadvantages, give an opinion on the disadvantages, and then we have a conclusion.
This is a four body paragraph structure.
The language in blue are the transitions to build coherence.
He has revolutionized.
I think I highlighted that in green there because I was trying to show you about using the perfect tense.
If you're using if you're able to demonstrate your ability to use the perfect tense or use the past
perfect tense properly, then you're using best.
That's range, right?
You're not just using simple present, simple paths, simple future you're able to use.
The perfect tense is also that's range.
Facet of society is an example of a collocation.
All right.
Teenage smartphone ownership is an example of a collocation, a series of words put together properly.
Since its inception, the smartphone has revolutionized every facet of society, and none is more impactful
than teenagers.
However, as smartphones cheapen due to competition, most teens singularly possess one, which begs
an exploration of the benefits and drawbacks of this phenomenon.
Therefore, this essay will highlight teenage smart smartphone ownership advantages and disadvantages
while supplying an opinion of each.
Boom.
There it is.
That's an introduction.
Three sentences.
I'm doing the same thing in every interview.
It doesn't matter the question.
I'm doing the same three things in the introduction, same three things.
Now, before I go to the body paragraph, I'm going to say something very quickly.
No, when you're looking at the essays that I'm writing, right, when you're looking at what I'm writing,
you need to.
But to put this, you need to see the forest for the tree.
You need to see the.
You need to see the big picture.
And what I mean by that is don't look at it and say, oh, I can never write that good.
That's not the point.
Right.
The point isn't necessarily.
I have written thousands of essays and I've talked to the Tofel and Gary exams for 20 years.
I'm a professor in the university.
I teach this stuff.
I teach critical thinking also, right?
So being able to write is something that I'm you know, you're not expected to have to write at the
same level.
I'm writing.
I'm writing at a really high level.
The reason why I do that is my hope is that you're looking at a paragraph and you're looking at it and
saying, okay, I like I like how I like how he used that word.
I'm going to use that in my writing.
I like how he used that phrase.
I'm going to use that in my writing.
I like how you started this sentence.
I'm going to use that in my writing.
Look through it and look for parts of it that you can use.
Look at the look at the individual parts of it and see, well, how can I add that to what I'm writing?
All right.
That's that's the point.
All right.
Now, first, we're going to talk about the advantages.
Yes.
On a micro level.
I look at it on a micro level, not a macro level.
Exactly.
So that was the question somebody asked.
Somebody asked.
You mean look at it on a micro level?
Yes, that's what I mean.
If you're looking at it on a micro level, you might say, okay, I'll see this paragraph.
And I like how he didn't just he didn't say for example, he said, imagine that.
Right.
He didn't say that.
He didn't say the basic level, for example.
He didn't say first.
He said out at the outset, oh, I'm going to take that.
I'm going to use that.
I like that.
I'm going to stop saying first.
I'm going to say at the outset.
I'm going to stay apart from education.
All right.
I'm going to use that phrase.
I like that phrase.
Right.
So that's that's what I'm that's what I'm trying that's the point I'm trying to get you to to really
look at.
Right.
So this is about advantages by and large.
Providing cell phones to young adults hold several gains worth discussing at the outset.
These phones greatly enhance teenage education by allowing online research note taking textbooks, recorded
lectures and educational apps.
Imagine that a student struggling with grammar homework could activate the Khan Academy application
and receive insightful grammar lessons.
Apart from education, this is building coherence, connecting, jumping from one idea to the next.
Apart from education, smartphones, relaxed parental safety concerns since these phones allow for tracking
and emergency contact.
Now we're getting into my opinion of the advantages.
I'm about to express my opinion of the advantages in the paragraph.
Overall, this paper opines that these benefits speak highly of the prospect of a minor owning a smartphone,
as any parent wants their child to hold every educational advantage.
Having Children of my own.
The positive related to safety resonate.
The positive related to safety resonates since lack of contact would be annoying to experience.
So you can see the author has expressed his opinion of the advantages within the paragraph.
This is coherent.
Right.
This is very, very coherent expressing the opinion.
I just.
I just told you the advantages.
So why not tell you immediately my opinion of them?
That's how you can achieve this goal within four paragraphs.
Then we have the disadvantages.
Right.
On the flip side, smartphones certainly have their share of drawbacks to providing an app, to providing
an adolescent a phone.
Foremost.
Instead of saying first.
Foremost.
The average consumer believes 24 hour contact is a boom boon is another way of saying advantage gained
is another way of saying advantage, but it means about the contrast this.
But teenagers experience extreme stress related to maintaining a constant physical and mental appearance
as proof.
Again, I didn't say, for example.
Right.
There are other ways you don't have to just I mean, show range as proof.
Recent news stories report how miners have committed suicide due to these smartphone stresses.
Furthermore, notwithstanding the continual contact stress, smartphones result in teenage cyberbullying,
addiction and limited attention span.
Case in point the average teenager spends more time on smartphone social media than any other aspect
of life, which distracts from the aforementioned educational benefits.
Again, we have here we have coherence up here.
I talked about educational benefits and then I talked about how this distracts from educational benefits.
That's coherent.
Overall, here's more opinion.
Overall, analyzing these cell phone distractions points out the need for extreme parental navigation
of teenage cell phone possession.
The negatives of teenage of teen ownership are downright scary.
This is opinion right here, everybody.
When one considers potential suicide, stress and life threatening addiction.
Right.
This is this is how you express opinion.
This is how you express opinion inside.
The language in blue represents transition language, coherent transition language.
That's what the language in blue represents.
This is the this right here.
What I'm looking at right now is both is academic in general.
As I've told you, for the general exam, you get asked about give your opinion.
Right.
This is just this is general I'm answering a general question right now.
Right.
Like I said, you can see it on both the question.
The question that says outweigh.
Is much more academic.
It's possible to see that on a general but rare.
A general question with much more say give your opinion.
And then we have the conclusion it seems a foregone conclusion.
It seems a foregone conclusion that the average teenage global citizen will count a smartphone as one
of their singular possessions.
However, parents and teens should consider the upsides and downsides before purchasing and monitor
teenage usage for any drawbacks.
There we have a four paragraph essay where you are, where you are discussing the advantages and disadvantages
and giving your opinion and giving your opinion.
Well, I'm glad you understand now, because they didn't tell you.
Just give your opinion of the advantages or just give your opinion of the disadvantages.
They didn't tell you that.
Right.
Again, that goes back to question analysis.
Right.
That goes after I tell people your analysis is so important.
The the the parts the first.
The first parts of doing of essay writing are the most important parts.
Question analysis outlining.
Right.
Question, analysis, outline.
And then after question analysis and outlining, the next most important parts are thesis statement
and topic sentences.
Right.
If you can't do those important parts, well, that's how people are messing up their score.
And then, of course, if you can't, right.
Without making mistakes, then you.
You just messing up your score a lot.